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darth_ender
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Collaborative Fanediting: An ROTJ Proposition (BACK ON TRACK WITH EMANSWFAN AT THE HELM--SEE POST 1488 OR OP FOR A LINK!)
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20-Dec-2011, 11:21 AM

Ronster said:

my favourite line....So Far

Oola and the fat female dancer performs... Lapti Nek is much sleazier and fits the setting better IMO

I hate both songs and the accompanying puppets or CGI characters.  Not to mention there is little need for this scene except establishing a trap door that leads to something scary.  I think it would be best just to see Oola dancing to a much better song briefly, Jabba tries to pull her close, she resists and falls to her death.  However if I'm in the minority here, this of course can stay.

Can we cut this please...

1.The Rancor KEEPERS have come into the cage and are examining their dead beast. One of them breaks down and weeps.

YES!  I mean to do so and forgot.  It's already done for my revised version.

A herd of wild banthas treks across Tatooine's dunes.[d1] 


 [d1]Some don’t like the banthas but I think they’re fine.

2.agreed but it is the second shot or smaller looking herd that needs to be removed IMO

 

This is the SARLACC[d1] 


 [d1]I don’t mind the Special Edition beak as much as others do, but I don’t mind if it is removed either.

3. Because the special edition tentacles move more realistically i suggest a combination of both especially for the establishing shot of the sarlac but for me i prefer no beak

 

 

 

Luke has hold on one of the rigging ropes from the mast. He gathers Leia in his other arm and kicks the trigger of the deck gun. The gun explodes into the deck as Luke and Leia swing out toward the skiff.

[d1] 


 [d1]Show more damage on Luke’s hand to better match when he’s on the X-wing.

4.For me it was always weird that he was holding his Light sabre as high as he could vertically in the air when his hand gets shot as there was nobody near him... I think they just wanted to show this as easily as possible.

5.Droid torture can go as you suggested but for me the main problem is the stupid tentacle that grabs C3PO in the corridor

I quite like ED-9v9 but if it gets cut I'm not bothered either.

LUKE: I'll meet you back at the fleet.[d1] 

 

LEIA: (over comlink) Hurry. The Alliance should be assembled by now.

 

LUKE: I will.


 [d1]Redundant.

LUKE[d1] : No, not yet.  I have to do some…thinking.


 [d1]This line would have to be dubbed.

6. This final line does work somewhat.. But better would be "I need to be alone for a while..."

Sometimes the advanced text editor is weird: I can't break the quote in some places for comment so I'll just finish here.  Bantha herds can easily be cut with no sacrifice to the plot, particularly the smaller herd (which I'm sure is supposed to appear distant, but in reality does look out of scale).  I would agree about the beak being cut but the tentacles remaining.  That would mean more work that simply choosing which version to edit in, but if our effects guys are willing, so am I.

It is weird that he holds his saber high, and furthermore that someone so close would miss his body and only hit him in the hand, but it's kind of important that it gets damaged and I can't think of a more reasonable way to show it.

EV9D9 is interesting, but that scene is unnecessary and the torture is stupid IMO.  I even thought so as a kid.

I agree, the final line would be better.  I think it would be good if there were a pause, perhaps with him saying, "I just...need to be alone for a while."  Good call.