I figured the crawl could use a little work. Thanks for the suggestion. I'm not sure what determines if something gets capitalized. These are the only words capitalized in all six films:

ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC: AOTC
DEATH STAR: ANH (not in ROTJ)
GALACTIC EMPIRE: ROTJ

So I suppose I wouldn't capitalize anything, or maybe just Death Star. As I keep working on the script I'll make a few changes to this early section including altering the capitalization.

You are right about the Death Star theme. It's also used as a motif when Rebel ships enter the Death Star II superstructure. Nevertheless, I personally feel it would be a dramatic intro to the Death Star as it was when the Falcon is tractored into the DSI (not the true intro, but really the first time we get a scope of how big the thing is). I don't know how well it would mesh with the Imperial March either, but if the two could be made to weave together, I think it'd be a nice touch. But maybe I'm wrong.

Interesting suggestion, Cobb. What do others think about getting Luke to shut the Rancor gate? Thanks for the kind words. I guess great minds think alike ;)