Minor nitpicks with the crawl:
It seems a little repetitive - the rebel alliance is already doomed, but the death star will spell certain doom, and two words are in all caps (Death Star and Sullust, which doesn't seem as important)
Post #555667
- Author
- Vladius
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- Collaborative Fanediting: An ROTJ Proposition (BACK ON TRACK WITH EMANSWFAN AT THE HELM--SEE POST 1488 OR OP FOR A LINK!)
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/555667/action/topic#555667
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- 19-Dec-2011, 7:54 PM