Here is part 1 of my edited script. It leaves a lot open for further suggestions, particularly during the whole Jabba subplot. I really feel like I may have grabbed a good emotional formula with this, so consider carefully the flow before being too harsh or suggesting something too radical. I personally like the slower intro, but as all OT movies start with bad guy ships, perhaps that spy scene could work out without disrupting the flow I've tried to create. This starts with Dagobah, moves to the Death Star and Vader, moves to Tatooine and Han's rescue, and ends with Luke's X-wing and the Millennium Falcon parting. I tried to add some colors and comments to make changes clearer (so you don't have to read the whole thing) as well as include commentary on the side. Hope this is a worthwhile read. There are no immensely drastic changes, but I think it alters the story and the mood in a way that I like.

http://www.4shared.com/office/imvWDYgy/ROTJ_script_edited_part_1.html?

Comments and suggestions are quite welcome.

EDIT: I also included some musical suggestions and meant to include more. I also meant to include some pictures, taken from the wishlist, but I forgot. Oh well, you still get a good sense of what I'm hoping for thus far.