The new clip is pretty good. Most of the stupid stuff is once again removed.

I'm not a big fan of the elevator shaft/falling ship sequence. I think it can be removed completely if you remove everything from 0:40 to 1:13. It can go something like this:

1. They call R2 and wait for the elevator.

2. The ship is hit. Right as it starts to lurch, add a shake, and then cut.

(Optional battle scenes here. But please, no falling. It makes no sense [even in Star Wars] and makes my head hurt.)

3. The three of them get up (notice, they are in front of an elevator). Obi Wan has been awakened by the explosion.

aalenfae said:

Anybody know where I can get the actual engine sounds of Grievous' flagship and stuff like that? It'd make replacing the music much easier (And eliminate the choppy transition, which (unless I wanted screaming battle droids), was unavoidable.

These engine sounds might be available from the Clone Wars CG cartoons.