I'm a bit late... but wow, what a difference... By streamlining the lightsaber fight with the fact that the ship is getting blown away gives the scene some tension and sense of urgency. Very well done. However, my only real change would be to cut Palpatine's "Good, Anakin!" and just have him simply cut his head off. Not make it obvious that Palpy is pulling the strings. I actually think all reference to Palpatine being evil should be removed, so that when he reveals his evil side it's abrupt.. if that's even possible. Otherwise, wow!