I still think it doesn't work. The theme almost sounds romantic and NOT Star Wars-y, to my ear at least. Meanwhile, some people over at a big John Williams forum found it and have a couple thoughts as well:
http://www.jwfan.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=10770&view=findpost&p=744347
Note that I didn't post it. I'm a member there, but my username is "rpvee", just like here.