rpvee said:
That's good, just needs to sound a bit smoother. And you completely ignored my other points.
it is difficult for me to answer everything, but I take note of everything I read and make change if possible and if I like it ; )
I am still working on this introduction dialogue, it was just a first take -
Concerning the fact that it's not "starwars like", this introduction itselft is not "star wars like" (the shot with SD and drums) , so I think a little bit of originality is acceptable.
the problem in the fact to put the dialogue a step further is that it will "hide" the music...and in this sequence the music "speaks" about the greatness of Obi-wan and Anakin's relationship...something that, unfortunatly, does not exist in 7 hours of movie ! this short sequence give the feeling that they are brother in arms, it's epic, and I am afraid to destroy this...
but I can try !