Episode I: The Ridiculous Menace (FULL MOVIE IS AVAILABLE TO STREAM, SEE FIRST POST) — Page 19

I like where you put the line, "you catch on pretty quick... You actually could place that in a more serious edit when Captain Pancake says, "We'll be sitting ducks."

It comes off as Han Solo sarcasm... A much needed solo moment.

doubleofive said:

If you can think of ANYTHING to replace "sitting ducks", I'll be grateful.

Meditate on this, I will.

xhonzi said:

A few more thoughts:

The Obi-Wan missed jump looks too off to me.  (The first one, not the overshoot, which is still awesome)  To me, it doesn't look like he jumps and misses, which I think is your intention, but just that the footage is reversed.  I say either play with that one a little more or go right to the overshoot.

And as far as the "simple flip leaves continuity errors"... What errors?  Is it anything worth worrying about?  This is a ridiculous edit, afterall.

I'm in love with the idea of him falling short, which is what it is supposed to be.  I agree it doesn't quite look right, I've tried a bunch of different ways and this one was the best I was able to achieve.  Maybe one of my "people" can try something, but yes it looks off.  It's jerky for some reason that I can't figure out.

I'll probably leave it in if it can't be fixed.  It still makes me laugh.

The continuity error is that the entire upper platform is now the wrong direction because it's not centered.  I know this edit doesn't need to address continuity like normal edits, but it still jumps out at me as pretty obvious.  There may be a fix for this, but if not I won't sweat it too much, because the overshoot is too awesome to lose.

timdiggerm said:

Do you think some pitch bending or something would help Ric's lines flow better? As much as I love his ridiculous stabilizer-centric dialogue, the jumps in audio are too harsh and really distract from the humor.

Honestly I think it's funnier the way his inflection on stabilizer is so different from the rest of the lines.  But I'm probably going to try cor77's suggestion and see if doing the shield thing instead works.  I'll post a comparison at some point for comment.

Is there a volume issue with his lines?  I try to match volume on the cut-up clips but it's hard for me to tell sometimes.

It would be funny if the 's' sound in "Sitting Ducks" was turned into a 'sh' sound (just saying).

Pancakes sounds so much like Mr T in The A-Team at times that some of the dialogue could be overlaid.

Ok, here's the original version again for reference:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SlNZ15OS6Yw

And here's the new version:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mwFTruGh04Q

I don't know, I'm kind of digging the new one.

New one fo' sho'.

doubleofive said:

I hate this actual scene. It started my dislike of R2. All these perfectly capable droids being blasted off the ship SCREAMING, and R2 literally looks over his shoulder and says something to the camera. Cocky little son of a...

If you read my cutlist script you'll notice that I mention that R2 mugs to the camera TWICE.  I've always hated that too, and it was fun to turn it into something I could enjoy.

I'm going to try a tweak the ending of the scene based on a great suggestion on FE.org, which also gave me a new idea for a follow-up scene.  More as I have time to work on it...

I now officially approve of this edit and will be available to sign autographed copies for the measly sum of five pounds upon completion.

@Ric: Will you have a table up at some DorkCon sometime soon?

@Fink:  Had you thought of putting some clips of other movies in at spots?  Like Dune?

Sluggo said:

@Fink:  Had you thought of putting some clips of other movies in at spots?  Like Dune?

I'm not really into doing that, I want to use as much from the prequels as possible.  I may use a few sound effects or dialogue from other movies as previously mentioned, but I want just about everything to come from these three movies.

I'd like to think that somewhere, in some middle-aged couple's basement, there's a teenager watching my clip of Obi-Wan getting ready to take care of the captured Naboo pilots and shouting "NO, THAT'S NOT HOW YOU RP!!!!"