I think those are good guidelines and I like the direction of the change in the second paragraph. EDIT: but I totally see your priorities, Spence. Get it done is job #1.
I would remove that part that says "Growing impatient for Luke to return, the Princess has developed her own plan."
If it is left at Lando sending a message to the Princess, then we will be more "surprised" by the Princess' plan. EDIT: In other words, telling us she has a plan is redundant.