Well, you have sort of contradicted yourself. As I am starting on the Death Star, my last paragraph should be about that, which it is. But it's also the matter of galactic importance, and therefore by your rationale should be first.

I don't have a lot of time to put all this out there, and I have things I need to set up. This seemingly "defined structure" of opening crawls is intriguing, but ultimately unnecessary to me. The crawl serves a simple point, and that is to set the story up so the viewer knows what's going on. And I think if anyone is watching the edit, reads the crawl, feels they know what's going on, and enjoys the rest of the movie, it has served its purpose.

I appreciate where you're coming from and thank you for the feedback, but getting the crawl "trilogy accurate" isn't really a priority for me.

I've said it before and I'll say it again: if you are a Star Wars fan that requires continuity, exact replication or other "purism" you may want to look elsewhere as far as Return of the Jedi edits go.