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Post #476522

Author
kaine23
Parent topic
Return of the Jedi - The Spence Final Cut (Released)
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Date created
21-Feb-2011, 5:12 PM

Tobar said:

I think it'd be fine as it is but if you were going to change it maybe instead of: "Little do they know that the GALACTIC EMPIRE is constructing a new DEATH STAR in secret." It might work better as: "Little do they know that the GALACTIC EMPIRE is secretly constructing a new DEATH STAR."

Ya know, that does actually sound better.