I think it'd be fine as it is but if you were going to change it maybe instead of: "Little do they know that the GALACTIC EMPIRE is constructing a new DEATH STAR in secret." It might work better as: "Little do they know that the GALACTIC EMPIRE is secretly constructing a new DEATH STAR."
Post #476515
- Author
- Tobar
- Parent topic
- Return of the Jedi - The Spence Final Cut (Released)
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/476515/action/topic#476515
- Date created
- 21-Feb-2011, 4:55 PM