Well the suggested change by hebrides over at fe.org went like this:

After learning the terrible truth of his father's fate, Luke Skywalker has returned to Dagobah to complete his Jedi training with Master Yoda, knowing he must again face Darth Vader.

Meanwhile, Lando Calrissian has infiltrated the court of the vile gangster JABBA THE HUTT. Learning that Chewbacca has been captured, Lando has sent a message to Princess Leia. Growing impatient for Luke to return and fearing that Lando will soon be discovered, the Princess has developed her own rescue plan.

Little do they know that the GALACTIC EMPIRE is constructing a new DEATH STAR in secret. When completed, this ultimate weapon will spell certain doom for the small band of rebels struggling to restore freedom to the galaxy...

So my question is, obviously this is better. But is it better enough to ask L8wrtr to do another version? Or is it fine the other way?