good first attempt, and i see what you're doing. i liked the voice in the dark, but that could have been an opportunity to put in some reminders from ESB. music was good too (what was it?)
agree with rpvee, a bit blunt with the cuts, although i wouldnt worry about the dullness. ROTJ sort of begins with the slow hangover after the binge that was ESB.
have a crack at reopening all the films? each one would demand a different flavour.
star wars but not star wars.