Harmy,
The new clip is promising as a test, but I don't know if it would work in the movie - without being distracting. I know you said it was quick and dirty, but one thing that really stands out is the floating grey blob in the sky where the ship used to be.
For this scene, I think it would preferable to go with the GOUT for the entirety, unless you were able to somehow spilt the shot into 2 and avoid the ronto altogether.