Hmm, your right I guess the shots of luke leaving degobah aren't needed. And I bet the suspensful music could fade into the imperial march of the DSII scene really nicely.

And hmm, I want to have the shot of the falcon and the xwing on the planet, otherwise we won't know where the droids come from.

Maybe we could alter the craw again to remove mention of anybody already being on tatooine, and just use the menu shot of the xwing and falcon entering tatooine and then show them parked, and then cut to the droids?