ray_afraid said:

Although the shots work, I don't think there is any need to show Luke leaving Dagobah. The cut would be smoother going from Luke and Obi-Wan's conversation straight to the establishing shot of the DS. Would also leave a little more mystery to the cloaked figure (Luke) entering Jabba's palace.

One more thing, I love the shot of the x-wing and the Falcon in the desert (add a little blowing sand and it would easily pass as a live action shot!) but I think the transition would work better cutting from the space shot of Tatooine to the droids in the desert. No need to let the audience know who's already there and who isn't until they reveal themselves.

I agree that the shot of Luke leaving dagobah is not needed. It's a bit jarring to see Luke flying off, then suddenly we have the imperial fleet. I think you should go straight from Ben's emperor line to the scene of the emperor arriving.

But after the emperor's scene, I think we need to show an establishing shot of tatooine of some kind. I think we can do better than the recycled shot from episode IV.

I believe there's a shot of the falcon and X-wing arriving at Tatooine from the menu of the 2004 DVD of Return of the Jedi. If we can rotoscope the Falcon from that shot, it would be the perfect arrival scene. I think showing the falcon and xwing parked together works as it.