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Post #460373

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ray_afraid
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Possessed Return of the Jedi-* Resurrected!!*
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Date created
31-Dec-2010, 9:58 PM

Just watched the clip. Great stuff! Here's just a few things that I feel need just a bit of work:

Obi-Wan suddenly sitting is a bit jarring. leaving the dialog whle he takes a seat would be better I think

Although the shots work, I don't think there is any need to show Luke leaving Dagobah. The cut would be smoother going from Luke and Obi-Wan's conversation straight to the establishing shot of the DS. Would also leave a little more mystery to the cloaked figure (Luke) entering Jabba's palace.

One more thing, I love the shot of the x-wing and the Falcon in the desert (add a little blowing sand and it would easily pass as a live action shot!) but I think the transition would work better cutting from the space shot of Tatooine to the droids in the desert. No need to let the audience know who's already there and who isn't until they reveal themselves.

I really like what you're doing here. The beginning of the film has so much more tension and emotion this way!

[edit] sorry if this post sounds like recycled bits from others, but I didn't read anything so nothing would be spoiled. But I've started looking back now and I see that maybe others have already mentioned some of this.