..... As I was saying,

I tried to post last night. I've been getting rides because I don't have a pick up truck, so I tried to turn in early.

Anyway, the Yoda-Luke-Ben-Luke talkfest always seemed too long. Ben-Luke is repeating and elaborating upon Yoda's exposition. Also, I've thought that the "Twins" reveal came too early. The 3PO "Toss out some key names and pretend your telling an epic tale" bit was a snag for me, as well.

My thought was to interweave the Ben-Luke tale with 3PO's tale to create the impression that two epic sagas are being told concurrently. After viewing the scenes carefully and seeing the Ben's hovel 005 blog idea, I think this might be adapted to a fan-edit.

Yoda-Luke might be cut after "I can't do it Artoo." 'Luke ducking out of the hut' might be moved to before the start of 3PO's tale. "I can't go on alone." might be inserted outside the hut. Luke might duck underneath a branch ( Fighter-cannon) or stay on Ben and cut out Luke's duck. Then back and forth between Ben-Luke and 3PO. I suspect that 'Mixed emotions' was the idea for Leia-Luke at the fleet, after watching it slo-mo. I don't suppose moving all that to Endor would be an easy trick.

For extra credit: Cut out the "Sister" bits. Make it just "Your twin" and make it uncertain whether Luke knows the identity of his twin. Find a way to transition Luke and Leia to sitting while cutting out all the 'Sister' bits there. Then just cut out at "Hey, what's..." and cut back in as Han passes Leia's head (?). Replace "come on, tell me" with "Hey, what's..." Then cut out "I can't..." and shorten Leia's choking on words. Then "But you could..." Then change Vader's lines to suggest that he senses the truth and might be revealing to Luke that Leia is his sister. Then find a way to insert "Like" "Luke is... my brother." and shorten Han's reaction. It's sort of a climactic revelation.

'Color-correction' will have to wait. I'm going to pretend I can fall asleep. :)