erm. hmm.
logo - very cool, but no. could work if someone tackled the reborn project.
red text - if you did this for every film in a different colour, like a thread somewhere suggested, then yes. but no.
grey ships - could you try making the light on them REALLY bright. the SDs in ANH look almost white, not gun metal grey. the fighters need some seperation, so perhaps they could remain the darker grey?
it would be awesome to see a vintage special effects genius redo this sequence with models, and see what is left with all the limitations.