It might be better to shift the "I understand" to after Mace has said he isn't a Master but still have Anakin give everyone a bit of dirty look (dropping the "What?").
Your take is better but it still shows Anakin's hand too openly.
Post #435163
- Author
- Bingowings
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- The Prequel Radical Redux Ideas Thread
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- Date created
- 25-Aug-2010, 10:12 PM