Possessed, I found time to give this a watch. Here is some quick feedback. I hope you find it useful.
Could the shot of Oola at about 08.20 be longer? It seems too quick.
When Luke delivers the line ending "... a gift, these two droids", the shot of Threepio and Artoo looks out of place, as Threepio seems surprised. Could you remove this?
Jedi lacks a capital in the subtitle, "There will be no bargain, young Jedi." and later at 17:40. You probably know this, but it is better be sure. Wookie should have a capital in the subtitle at about 09.30.
I found the cut at 09:04 too abrupt.
I have never liked the shots of Boba Fett and girls at 09:45 and 10:20. Could these be removed?
I do not feel the cuts to the beginning of the thermal detonator sequence quite come off, although the one at the end is good.
You need a comma before Solo at 10:14.
I hate the SE Sarlac beast. :-( Most of the trims to the fight sequence work, but I do not like the one that comes just before 26:00. It is the audio: music can be a pain.
I like the trimming of the shuttle sequence, but the cut at 42:42 is too abrupt - visually. The audio seems to go out of sync about three-quarters of an hour in.
Could you cut, "Then my father is truly dead..."? It would enhance yout attempt to change the feel of this sequence slightly, and I think it would work. If so, you could cut the close up of Vader at 59:50, so we only see him looking pensive - if that is possible! - at the end of the scene.
I like how you cut the Threepio as deity and the whole flying chair episode, but the cut after Artoo is released to Leia and Han embracing is too abrupt.
Are you cutting the 2004 SE celebrations throughout the Empire and removing Hayden as the ghost of Anakin? I hate both of those SE changes.
For future reference, the AVI should be 23.976fps not 29.97. I know it this only a quick preview, but even for 600MB it looks pretty bad.
Overall, there is some impressive work and fine ideas here. I shall really look forward to the DVD.