Okay, I’ve finally had time to go back and fill in all those slots I ‘reserved’ above to start things off properly now. Feel free to comment on anything from here onwards (movie-related that is…) I’ll continue adding loads of other trailers, old and new, when time allows.
Here’s a few more…
THE WAR OF THE WORLDS (released 1953/directed by Byron Haskin)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Imjio167nJo NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
WAR OF THE WORLDS (released 2005/directed by Steven Spielberg)
Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mtqFbzCnG94 NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Theatrical Trailer 1 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VqrdrBtGTeE NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Theatrical Trailer 2 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XP42yAyC3YQ
NOTE - Just in case anyone happens to stumble across this old ‘Trailers’ thread of mine sometime, I’ve just temporarily used this space to put the following edit ideas/shots on here to remind myself about them at some point!
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INITIAL IDEAS FOR 1ST EPISODE OF ‘THE MANDALORIAN’ TV SHOW -
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I MIGHT change SILENT silver LUCASFILM logo to SHORTENED ‘fanfare’ version.
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DISCARD the ‘shiny characters’ line-up and ‘rainbow star wars’ logo, and instead ADD the SILENT ‘A long time ago, in a galaxy far far away’ blue wording BEFORE cutting to the ‘locator’ beeps and wind of the first shot.
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The blue ‘gillman’ alien guy was really annoying, and it would be tempting to cut the ENTIRE first part of the show to get rid of him…EXCEPT I really like some of the initial imagery, so I think it might be possible to DISCARD some of the scenes involving him, and cut directly to the close-up of the Mandalorian pushing him into the chamber to be ‘carbonised’! - POSSIBLY get rid of the CGI’D driverless golden speeder, and just cut to the rusty speeder with the driver after the SPY ALIEN plays his flute?
In the 2ND EPISODE, I might DISCARD everything before the Mandalorian and floating Yodaling walking towards us with the sun behind them (but keep THE MANDALORIAN title??), as they then come across the jawas stripping the ship…OR I MIGHT include initial start of episode where the Mandalorian fights off the Younglings attackers, and then CUT to them walking with the sun behind them (but keep THE MANDALORIAN title??)…while DISCARDING the whole scene of the Mandalorian attending to his wound as the Yodaling puppet tries to heal him.
MY NEW BEGINNING FOR ROGUE ONE -
START OFF with the familiar 20th Century Fox/Lucasfilm logos and fanfare of previous Star Wars movies -
(NOTE - I might just start off with the silent LUCASFILM LOGO and blue wording instead, seeing as these are merely ‘standalone’ stories outwith the MAIN SAGA storyline with Luke and co.)
NOTE - I NEED TO ADD A LOT MORE ‘FILLER’ SCREENSHOTS TO THIS, AND MIGHT MENTION THAT I ALWAYS TRY TO IMAGINE ANY SCENES I’M DISCARDING AS BEING LOST ‘DELETED SCENES’, TO SEE IF I’D REALLY HAVE WANTED TO INCLUDE THEM IF THEY’D BEEN NEWLY DISCOVERED!
YOUTUBE CLIP OF SOME LUCASFILM LOGOS - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wdYaG3o3bgE
( IS THIS JUST THE SAME LUCASFILM LOGOS RE-UPLOADED? - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_UaDulL4X84 )
YOUTUBE CLIP OF LUCASFILM LOGO WITH NEW THEME - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JMqSKd_PXAQ
( IS THIS JUST THE SAME NEW THEME RE-UPLOADED? - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OkzfZ3EcHqw )
TEST IMAGE LINKS FOR MY PREFERRED ‘ROGUE ONE’ EDIT INTRO POSSIBILITIES (THESE MAY NOT BE FINAL ORDER!) - (added 6th NOV. 2017 - sequence shots shortened to show beginning and end of scenes I have in mind) -
(ADDITIONAL NOTE to myself: the Screencaps site doesn’t include the 20TH CENTURY FOX logo or the ‘rainbow’ LUCASFILM logo, so I would just use the first 2 image links immediately below to show them instead) - ANOTHER ADDITIONAL NOTE to myself: To get any of these links to actually show as pics on this site, I need to add  at the very end too!
- SILVER LUCASFILM LOGO (NOTE - the ‘Force Awakens’ version is larger)
(NOTE - I MIGHT possibly use the ‘colourful’ version instead of the ‘silver’ version…and I MIGHT go for a totally ‘hybrid’ intro. scene of my own which would go like this - 20TH CENTURY FOX logo and ‘FANFARE’ music begins/then instead of the LUCASFILM logo at this point, we’d see the STAR WARS title recede away to the rest of the ‘FANFARE’ music/then we’d see the LUCASFILM logo and the ‘A LONG TIME AGO…’ wording in silence, in the same kind of way that ROGUE ONE starts…OR ALTERNATIVELY…I MIGHT just keep the 20TH CENTURY FOX logo and LUCASFILM logo in their normal place with the ‘FANFARE’ music, and THEN have the STAR WARS title recede away in silence before we then see the ‘A LONG TIME AGO…’ wording in silence too…OR ANOTHER POTENTIAL ALTERNATIVE…I MIGHT replace the 20TH CENTURY FOX logo with the receding STAR WARS title instead, as we then see the LUCASFILM logo, and then see the ‘A LONG TIME AGO…’ wording)
- A LONG TIME AGO… INTRO. WORDING (NOTE - the ‘Force Awakens’ version is larger)
(NOTE - I then MIGHT possibly put receding STAR WARS MAIN TITLE/static starfield over ROGUE ONE music/or SILENCE at this point instead!? - but see new idea above)
(NOTE - I won’t be including either the ROGUE ONE or SOLO ‘Main Titles’ in my edits of these ‘standalone’ movie spin-offs, due to the fact that I really dislike the weak look of the ROGUE ONE font, and because I’m DISCARDING the entire first 25 mins. of SOLO altogether, including it’s ‘Main Title’. I also dislike that the SOLO ‘main title’ includes the byline ‘A Star Wars Story’ but ROGUE ONE doesn’t, even though they are BOTH ‘standalone’ spin-offs - so the A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away… wording effectively becomes the common ‘main title’ which introduces these ‘standalone’ storyline settings…so I’m just looking on these movies as being SUPPLEMENTARY to the ‘main saga’ for myself)
I’m intending to TOTALLY DISCARD all the various scenes that are seen BEFORE the ‘JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON/SAW’S GANG WITH BHODI’ scene (NOTE - SHOULD I LIST THEM TOO?), but here’s the movie’s current order of scenes shown AFTER that -
JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON/SAW’S GANG WITH BHODI…
…which transitions into WOBANI PLANET/IMPERIAL LABOR CAMP PRISON TRUCK RESCUE OF JYN ERSO…
…which transitions into SHIP HEADED TO YAVIN 4/REBEL ALLIANCE HEADQUARTERS/JYN’S INTERROGATION/SHIP LEAVING YAVIN 4…
…which transitions to SAW’S INTERROGATION OF ‘DEFECTOR PILOT’ BHODI…
…which transitions to TIE FIGHTER APPROACHING STARDESTROYERS OVER DEATHSTAR/TARKIN’S DISCUSSING ‘DEFECTOR PILOT’ WITH KRENNIC/TARKIN LOOKING OUT AT DEATHSTAR…
…which transitions to BLACKNESS/FLASHBACKS OF YOUNG JYN WITH HER PARENTS AND KRENNIC/GIVEN A PENDANT BY HER MOTHER/HUGGED BY HER FATHER/BALD SAW OPENING THE HATCH…
…which transitions to JYN SUDDENLY WAKENING UP TO LOOK AT HER PENDANT/LOOKING OUT AT JEDHA PLANET/LANDING ON JEDHA
NOTE - although I’m DISCARDING the ‘flashback’ scene altogether, I’m still deciding whether the rest of this current order of scenes sufficiently tells the story of the ‘defector pilot’ Bhodi well enough for me in this order, or not. If not, then I’m thinking about focusing on him more right from the start like this instead -
START OFF WITH THE USUAL 20TH CENTURY FOX/LUCASFILM LOGOS AND FANFARE -
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NOTE - SEE THIS SITE FOR SIZE REFERENCE - https://logos.fandom.com/wiki/Lucasfilm/Other
CUT TO THE JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON FOR MY NEW OPENING, AS THE ‘DEFECTOR PILOT’ BHODI IS THEN TAKEN TO MEET SAW’S GANG -
SCENE ENDS ON ‘PULL-BACK’ OF ‘JEDI ROCKS’ -
CUT TO CLOSE-UP OF SAW APPROACHING TO QUESTION BHODI -
BHODI IS TAKEN AWAY WHEN SAW ORDERS “BOR GULLET!” TO HIS GANG (NOTE - I originally WASN’T going to show the creature at all, but will probably include it in the new edited version I came up with to improve it for myself) -
TRANSITIONS TO A TIE-FIGHTER, AS KRENICK AND TARKIN DISCUSS THE ‘DEFECTOR PILOT’ ABOARD A STARDESTROYER NEAR THE DEATH STAR -
SCENE ENDS ON TARKIN LOOKING OUT AT THE DEATH STAR -
CUT TO WOBANI IMPERIAL PRISON PLANET AND JYN’S RESCUE FROM A TRANSPORT VEHICLE (NOTE - I’ll probably cut to the WOBANI planet shot rather than direcly to the transport vehicle…as it might seem as if the transport vehicle is supposed to be on the Death Star that Tarkin is looking at, if I just join those two shots together directly!) -
(REMOVE close-up shots of Jyn ‘suddenly sitting upright’ and ‘the sleeping alien’)
SCENE ENDS ON JYN BEING THROWN ON GROUND BY DROID -
TRANSITIONS TO YAVIN 4 AND JYN’S INTERROGATION BY REBELS -
END OF JYN GETTING INTERROGATED -
TRANSITIONS TO JYN AND CASSIAN ABOUT TO LEAVE REBEL BASE -
SCENE ENDS ON SHIP FLYING AWAY FROM YAVIN 4 -
- ROGUE ONE MAIN TITLE
(OR alternatively, place receding STAR WARS MAIN TITLE/static starfield over ROGUE ONE music/or SILENCE here instead!? - https://caps.pictures/197/7-starwars4/full/star-wars4-movie-screencaps.com-3.jpg )
(NOTE - either way, I might decide to put MAIN TITLE immediately after No. 2 wording instead?)
NOTE - I MIGHT BE DISCARDING THE ‘ROGUE ONE’ AND ‘SOLO’ MAIN TITLES ALTOGETHER FOR MY VERSIONS, SO I’D CUT FROM THE SHOT OF TARKIN STARING AT THE DEATH STAR TO THE SHOT OF JYNN AWAKENING SUDDENLY INSTEAD, AS THE SHIP APPROACHES JEDHA - the choice I have to make is whether to KEEP the movie’s current order of scenes which give the impression that the REBELS know about the defector BEFORE the EMPIRE does (even though my opening scene has one of Saw’s men saying the Imperials will be looking for the defector - and also because I’m discarding the scene of Cassian being told about it by an informer)…OR to try and cut it in the way I’ve shown above - but this rests on the cut from the ship leaving Yavin 4 directly to the close-up shot of Jynn waking up suddenly working smoothly
ALTERNATIVELY - I COULD START WITH BHODI CAPTURED BY SAW’S GANG, WHICH TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL TO WOBANI PLANET AND JYN’S JAILBREAK, WHICH TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL TO YAVIN 4 AND JYN’S INTERROGATION…BUT CUT TO SAW’S LEGS AND THE BHODI’S INTEROGATION WHICH TRANSITIONS TO TARKIN ON THE DEATH STAR, AT THE END OF JYN’S INTERROGATION WHERE HER CLOSE-UP IS OFFERED FREEDOM…AND THEN CUT TO JYN AND CASSIAN WALKING IN THE BASE JUST AFTER THE SHOT OF TARKIN STARING AT THE DEATH STAR, AND ONCE THAT SCENE ENDS WITH THE SHIP ACCELERATING AWAY FROM YAVIN 4, I COULD THEN CUT TO THE CLOSE-UP OF JYN WAKING UP SUDDENLY AS THE SHIP APPROACHES JHEDDA
GO INTO WHY I’M NOT KEEN ON THE LACK OF FOX LOGO AND FANFARE TO KICK THINGS OFF, AND MIGHT SHOW THIS CARTOON IMAGE (should I also show the cartoony font saying ‘A Long Time Ago…etc.’ along with it, or not??) -
Mention this link about the 20th Century Fox logo and fanfare in my final description - https://www.hollywoodreporter.com/heat-vision/why-disney-should-add-foxs-fanfare-back-star-wars-1067900
START OFF with the familiar 20th Century Fox/Lucasfilm logos and fanfare of previous Star Wars movies -
CUT to the Jedha Imperial-occupied moon for my NEW OPENING, as the ‘defector pilot’ Bhodi is taken to meet Saw’s gang -
Scene ends on ‘pull-back’ of ‘jedi rocks’ -
TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL to Wobani Imperial Prison Planet and Jyn’s rescue from a transport vehicle -
(REMOVE close-up shots of Jyn ‘suddenly sitting upright’ and ‘the sleeping alien’) NOTE - “Somebody wake up Hicks!”
Scene ends on Jyn being thrown on ground by droid -
TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL to Yavin 4 and Jyn’s interrogation by rebels -
(NOTE - we are given a full introduction to Cassian Andor and Jyn Erso during this, and also given full details concerning Saw Gerrera, Galen Erso, and the defector)
End of Jyn getting interrogated -
CUT to close-up of Saw approaching Bhodi to question him -
(NOTE - I MIGHT end up putting the zoom-in on Saw’s hide-out first, if the audio blends in okay)
Bhodi is taken away when Saw orders “Bor Gullet!” to his gang (NOTE - I definately WON’T be including the CGI creature however!) -
TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL to a tie-fighter, as Krenick and Tarkin discuss the ‘defector pilot’ aboard a stardestroyer near the death star -
Scene ends on Tarkin looking out at the death star -
CUT to Jyn and Cassian about to leave rebel base -
Scene ends on ship flying away from Yavin 4 -
CUT to close-up of Jyn suddenly awakening as ship approaches Jedha -
(NOTE - I’m discarding the ‘flashback dream’ footage which normally comes before this)
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HD RELEASE LUCASFILM INTRO. - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6FNiyvy31ew
6th POST
Okay, I’m now going to describe how I’d like to see the beginning of ROGUE ONE done differently, but first, I’d like to discuss the new intro. layout that DISNEY came up with for their movies -
Like others at the time, I sorely missed the familiar 20TH CENTURY FOX logo and fanfare for a little extra bit of anticipation before the iconic blue A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away… wording silently appeared to introduce the crescendo of the equally iconic STAR WARS main title and scroll theme…and found the new replacement to be very weak sauce and lacklustre in comparison. In addition to that, I also disliked the way the new silver LUCASFILM logo and blue wording were both reduced in size compared to the bigger versions previously seen at the start of THE FORCE AWAKENS.
So for my own viewing purposes someday, I’d much prefer to REINSTATE the 20th CENTURY FOX logo and fanfare at the start of THE FORCE AWAKENS, THE LAST JEDI, and THE RISE OF SKYWALKER, to restore some continuity throughout the Original Trilogy, Prequel Trilogy, and Sequel Trilogy ‘Skywalker saga’ movies for myself.
However, I’m content that the lack of fanfare intros./scrolls for the ‘standalone’ movies such as ROGUE ONE and SOLO helps to differentiate them from the ‘main 9-movie saga’ for myself anyway…although I’d prefer to give them a similar new silent intro. instead, which includes a certain ‘Star Warsy’ element which I really missed.
So here’s my proposed NEW OPENING for ROGUE ONE which I’d prefer to see - I had originally intended to COMPLETELY DISCARD ALL THE OPENING SCENES of the existing movie…and begin with the ‘the planet Jedha with the defecting cargo pilot and Saw’s gang’ instead…as I’m not too keen on the current opening, nor the fact that we start off with Jyn as a youngster, nor the fact that Captain Ando ruthlessly backshoots his defenceless contact when we first meet him - so I wanted to introduce the two main protagonists in a different way, and preferred to just have Captain Ando first appear at Jyn’s interrogation at the rebel base instead, seeing as it works as a good introduction to him, where he explains everything anyway.
HOWEVER, I eventually decided to start off with the two main protagonists rather than the defector after all, but WITHOUT Captain Ando killing his contact -
We START OFF with the SILENT silver LUCASFILM logo and blue wording -
(NOTE - I’d DISCARD the smaller logo and lettering that were seen in ROGUE ONE, as shown HERE and HERE , as I much prefer the larger versions that were seen in THE FORCE AWAKENS instead) - PUT THIS IN A BLUE BOX?
CUT to -
CUT to -
NOTE - IF YOU PLAY THESE ONE AFTER ANOTHER, YOU’LL GET A BETTER IDEA OF HOW THIS WAY LOOK -
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Silver LUCASFILM logo - https://streamable.com/0snvf
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Receding STAR WARS title - https://streamable.com/s9s6k
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Blue wording - https://streamable.com/esw0i
…and then we CUT* to the ROGUE ONE title -
NOTE - The ROGUE ONE title starts off much closer to us before it recedes away, so that we initially only see the letters showing ‘GUE O’ at first.
…and then we continue on as normal, as we get our first glimpse of Jyn -
…as she wakes and sits up, and we end on this shot -
NOTE - She is seen to sit a bit more upright than this shot below actually shows.
THIS IS JUST A POSSIBILITY, AS I MIGHT YET GO WITH THE FAMILIAR 20TH CENTURY FOX LOGO AND ‘RAINBOW’ LUCASFILM LOGO INSTEAD - Also, would I need begin the ‘theme’ music over some of the previous blue wording before the ‘ROGUE ONE’ title appears, or even just a little bit over blackness BEFORE the title appears??
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NOTE - This is the point where I’d prefer to reposition some of the earlier footage I like from the start of the movie instead, as a way of revealing more of Jyn’s backstory from when she was younger.
FINAL NEW ROGUE ONE OPENING - ALSO SHOW HOW I WAS ORIGINALLY GOING TO START WITH ‘JEDI ROCKS’ SCENE WITH BHODI, THEN CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL UNTIL JYN IS THROWN ON GROUND BY TALL DROID, THEN CUT TO ‘ROGUE ONE’ TITLE AND THEME, THEN CUT TO SHIP TRAVELLING TO YAVIN 4 AND THE REBEL BASE - AS A ‘REPRISE’ OF THE THEME WORKED PRETTY WELL I THOUGHT.
6th POST
So here’s my proposed new opening for ROGUE ONE now.
There’s a LOT I like about this movie, but once again there’s plenty throughout I’d prefer to alter. However, the MAIN thing I would change for myself is the way the beginning was structured. My own preference would be to start off with Jyn as an adult, rather than as a child…and luckily, there’s a straightforward way to do this without scrapping all of the early scenes.
But before I start, I’d like to mention the opening title introduction to the movie first -
Like others, I really missed the familiar 20th Century Fox logo and fanfare, but to have it open SILENTLY without the usual STAR WARS title and scroll theme music too, felt really jarring at the time…and seemed pretty weak sauce compared to the triumphant introduction of previous entries in the franchise.
And on top of that, I didn’t care for the fact that the new silver LUCASFILM logo and it’s follow-up blue wording had been shrunk in size as seen here -
But I’m using ROGUE ONE to END my personal ‘Star Wars saga’ viewing order on, as I just look on it as an additional fun watch AFTER the ‘main’ 9-chapter ‘SKYWALKER’ storyline concludes…so I’m content for the likes of it and other ‘standalone’ movie storylines such as SOLO to start off less bombastically than the ‘main saga’ chapters do anyway, as a way to differentiate them somewhat.
However, I’d still prefer to alter the current opening intro a little for myself, to restore just a bit more of that ‘Star Warsy’ anticipation which I missed…and there are a couple of options which I’m considering -
One would go like this -
We START OFF with the familiar 20th Century Fox logo and fanfare
NOTE - I believe there’s a new Disney version of the logo without the ‘A News Corporation Company’ now, so I’d probably use that.
…but the fanfare would finish over the LARGER silver LUCASFILM logo which was seen in THE FORCE AWAKENS instead -
…before the blue wording silently appears and eventually fades away too -
…and at this point, the movie begins.
However, here’s an alternative version which I’m equally mulling over too…which I’ll use as the introduction to start off my alterations now -
We START OFF with the familiar STAR WARS title, as it SILENTLY recedes away from us and fades out -
…as the silver LUCASFILM logo silently appears -
…before the blue wording silently appears and eventually fades out too -
…and then we CUT* to the ROGUE ONE title as the main theme music kicks in -
C-T (this shot below is from ‘Cap-That’ screenshots site)
NOTE - The ROGUE ONE title starts off much larger than shown in the shot above, as we only see the letters showing ‘GUE O’ when it first appears, and it also recedes much smaller than shown in the shot below.
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…and then we continue on as normal, as the music fades away, and we get our first introduction to Jyn Erso -
…as a drip on her forehead wakes her up and she sits upright, and we end on this shot -
NOTE - Jyn actually sits more fully upright than shown in the shot above.
ALSO - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of Jyn wiping her forehead - CLICK HERE , and I’d also prefer to discard the shot of her sleeping alien cellmate which then appears immediately after - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Jyn sitting upright, as she looks out her prison cell to see a stormtrooper guard walk past -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the music swells and we head to the RING OF KAFRENE TRADING OUTPOST -
…as we pan down to a busy marketplace, and get our first introduction to Cassian Andor -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the aliens at the food stall, to quicken the pace here slightly - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Cassian continuing to walk through the busy marketplace as a stormtrooper approaches -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Cassian turns to run down an alley, and meets up with a contact who’s nervously waiting to tell him some news from Jedha. The contact tells Cassian “AN IMPERIAL PILOT…ONE OF THE CARGO DRIVERS, HE DEFECTED YESTERDAY…HE’S TELLING PEOPLE THEY’RE MAKING A WEAPON…THE KYBER CRYSTALS, THAT’S WHAT THEY’RE FOR”
Then Cassian asks “WHAT KIND OF WEAPON?”, as the contact anxiously tries to leave saying “LOOK, I HAVE TO GO”…
…as Cassian suddenly grabs him and shoves him back, demanding “WHAT KIND OF WEAPON?!”
…as the contact yells “A PLANET KILLER!”
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - This isn’t a biggie by any means, but I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the contact yelling “THAT’S WHAT HE CALLED IT!”, as he knocks Cassian’s hand away - CLICK HERE , because Cassian is then seen to still be holding the contact’s coat in the next shot immediately afterwards…and although the contact’s face is not lined up exactly between the two shots I’d join together instead, I reckon it would look less jarring in motion than seeing Cassian still holding his jacket after being shrugged off…as the contact is then seen to shrug off Cassian’s hand just afterwards anyway.
…and then we CUT* to Cassian taken aback as he says “A PLANET KILLER?..” in a hushed tone -
…as the contact shrugs Cassian’s hand off, saying “SOMEONE NAMED ERSO SENT HIM, SOME OLD FRIEND OF SAW’S”, as Cassian then says “GALEN ERSO!..”, then demands “…WAS IT?!” -
…as the contact says “I DON’T KNOW, THEY WERE LOOKING FOR SAW WHEN WE LEFT…”
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point where Cassian says “WHO ELSE KNOWS ABOUT THIS?” , and the contact replies “I HAVE NO IDEA” - CLICK HERE , and I’d also prefer to discard the shot which appears immediately after it too, where the contact says “IT’S ALL FALLING APART…SAW’S RIGHT…” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to the contact loudly saying “…THERE’S SPIES EVERYWHERE!”, as two stormtroopers appear saying “WHAT’S ALL THIS?..C’MON, LET’S SEE SOME SCAN DOCS”
…as Cassian pretends to kneel down for his gloves, then turns around to shoot the stormtroopers -
…as his shocked contact says “NO…WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!”, while people at the the end of the ally react, and Cassian looks for a way out -
…as people flee the area -
…as a stormtrooper appears at the end of the alley, and reports “TROOPERS DOWN, SECTOR NINE!” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the contact saying “I’LL NEVER CLIMB OUT OF HERE, MY ARM!” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to several stormtroopers running through the crowds, saying “GET OUT OF THE WAY…MOVE,MOVE!” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the scene which appears at this point of Cassian saying “CALM DONW, CALM DOWN…IT WILL BE ALRIGHT” as he then back-shoots his unsuspecting contact - CLICK HERE, as that put me right off his character from the start when he did that. When Cassian has no choice but to escape himself, I’d rather have seen him just having to leave his unfortunate contact to an uncertain fate, instead of ruthlessly backshooting him…as I wanted to like his character better during this first impression of him, and he was already a ‘badass’ after shooting the two stormtroopers.
…and then we CUT* to a close-up of Cassian tucking his blaster away as an alarm blares -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d discard the beginning of the shot which appears at this point of Cassian looking down - CLICK HERE , and just start from the point where he’s already turned to make his escape, which will give the impression that he’s just having to leave his contact behind to his fate.
…and then we CUT* to Cassian starting to make his getaway, as the music rises and he climbs out of the alley -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we head to the JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON, where the defecting cargo pilot Bhodi is captured by Saw’s gang -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we head to the WOBANI IMPERIAL PRISON PLANET and a large transport vehicle appears -
…as we see that Jyn is now aboard the vehicle in chains along with other prisoners -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d discard the shot which appears at this point of Jyn suddenly sitting upright instead of leaning forward like her other shots - CLICK HERE , and I’d also discard this close-up of the alien which then appears immediately afterwards too - CLICK HERE , as I’d prefer to make it look like the prisoner opposite Jyn is looking over at the stormtrooper guards at this point instead.
…and then we CUT* to the stormtrooper guards -
…as Jyn is looking back and forth, until the transport vehicle suddenly jolts to a halt -
…as a stormtrooper guard says “WHAT NOW?” as he stands up, and another stormtrooper replies “I DON’T KNOW, MUST BE ANOTHER PICKUP” -
…as the stormtrooper guard says “I THOUGHT WE HAD EVERYBODY”, as he reacts to a knocking sound, and turns around -
…as armed rebel troops board the transport vehicle -
…and the rebels identify Jyn as ‘Liana Hallik’, and free her from her chains. Jyn then proceeds to attack the rebels with a handy shovel, and then runs towards the transport vehicle door to escape -
…as a tall droid stops her, and throws her to the ground -
…as the tall droid says “CONGRATULATIONS, YOU ARE BEING RESCUED…PLEASE DO NOT RESIST” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we head to YAVIN 4 and the REBEL ALLIANCE BASE -
…as Jyn is taken into the rebel base for questioning -
…and we continue on as normal, as we learn a lot of information about Jyn’s background when she is initially spoken to by General Draven, Mon Mothma, and Captain Cassian Andor -
General Draven speaks saying “YOU’RE CURRENTLY CALLING YOURSELF LIANA HALLIK. IS THAT CORRECT? POSSESSION OF UNSANCTIONED WEAPONS. FORGERY OF IMPERIAL DOCUMENTS. AGGRAVATED ASSAULT. ESCAPE FROM CUSTODY. RESISTING ARREST. IMAGINE IF THE IMPERIAL AUTHORITIES HAD FOUND OUT WHO YOU REALLY WERE, JYN ERSO. THAT IS YOUR GIVEN NAME, IS IT NOT? JYN ERSO, DAUGHTER OF GALEN ERSO. A KNOWN IMPERIAL COLLABORATOR IN WEAPONS DEVELOPMENT.”**
…as Mon Mothma then tells Jyn it’s a chance for her to make a fresh start, and that they think that she can help them…as she then introduces Captain Cassian Andor who proceeds to question Jyn…who tells him that she hasn’t seen her father since 15 years, and that Saw Gerrera saved her life when she was a child, and raised her…but that she hasn’t seen him since years.
…and we also find out that the rebels want her to help them to meet with Saw, to get access to the ‘Imperial defector’ to confirm his story about the weapon, and to try and locate Jyn’s father and bring him back to testify about it to the Senate.
…as Jyn and Cassian walk towards a ship where the tall droid K-2SO is already aboard, as General Draven calls Cassian over to quietly order him to ignore what was said about taking Galen Erso back, and that he’s to kill him instead if he finds him.
…and then we continue on as normal, as Cassian, Jyn, and K-2SO fly off on their mission -
…and then we continue on as normal, as a pair of metal legs approach, and we hear the words “LIES…DECEPTIONS!” -
…as we get our first introduction to Saw Gerrera who suspiciously confronts Bhodi -
…as Saw orders “BOR GULLET!” to his gang, and Bhodi is hooded again and taken away -
…and then we continue on as normal, as a TIE Fighter screams past, and a stardestroyer comes into view in front of the Death Star -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Krennic approaches Tarkin on a stardestroyer, where Tarkin discusses the missing cargo pilot and the need for an immediate test of the weapon…and that failure will find him explaining why to a far less patient audience -
…as Krennic says “I WILL NOT FAIL”, then turns to leave, as Tarkin looks out at the Death Star -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the screen momentarily goes black before the first part of Jyn’s ‘flashback’ dream of past times with her parents begins -
…as Jyn’s father Galen comes over to Jyn saying “WHAT’S THE MATTER JYNA?..ARE YOU AFRAID?”
…and then we continue on as normal, as Galen playfully lifts her up and puts her to bed saying “I’LL ALWAYS PROTECT YOU” - 
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to have Saw with a headful of hair right from the start, as I found the transformation of him starting out as completely bald to then having an abundance of hair to be quite jarring…so I’d discard the rest of the ‘flashback’ shots which appear at this point which end with his bald appearance opening the hatch - CLICK HERE …and would replace them with an alternative, EXTENDED ‘flashback’ at this point instead…as a way of revealing a devastating aspect of Jyn’s past, while allowing me to include important footage and dialogue from the opening which I liked, but didn’t want to start the movie off with.
…and then we CUT* to another time with Jyn as her ‘flashback’ dream takes a turn for the worse, as a black ship screams downwards towards a planet -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the ship flying over the beach…as well as it’s flyby past the working droid…and the close-up of the droid - CLICK HERE , CLICK HERE , and CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to young Jyn running frantically as the black ship passes overhead -
…and we end on this shot -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we see the black ship on a monitor screen -
…as Jyn’s concerned father and mother look on -
…and Jyn eventually reaches her homestead -
…as she says “MAMA!” on entering -
…and her mother Lira says “WE KNOW” -
…as her father Galen tells her “JYN, GATHER YOUR THINGS, IT’S TIME”, and they all hurriedly rush to grab some belongings -
…as Lira rushes towards a monitor in the kitchen area and looks over at Jyn -
…as the monitor beeps and an image appears, and we hear a male voice urgently say “HELLO” -
…as Lira turns to the monitor saying “SAW!”, and we end on this shot -
NOTE - Luckily for my purposes, bald Saw is indistinct in the shot above due to the angle of the monitor, as I’d prefer to discard the close-up shot of the monitor which appears immediately after at this point, where Lira says “…IT’S LIRA, IT HAPPENED…HE’S COME FOR US” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Jyn looking towards her mother, as we hear Saw advise “YOU KNOW WHAT TO DO” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the black ship turns to land -
…and we end on this shot as we hear Jyn’s father Galen say “JYNA, COME HERE…” -
…and continues to say “REMEMBER, WHATEVER I DO…I DO IT TO PROTECT YOU…SAY YOU UNDERSTAND” -
…as Jyn says “I UNDERSTAND” -
…and Galen says “I LOVE YOU STARDUST”
…as Jyn says “I LOVE YOU TOO PAPA”
…and Jyn’s mother Lira says “GALEN…” -
…as Galen says “GO!” -
…and we end on this shot -
…and then we continue on as normal, as several black troopers approach -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of Krennic and the black troopers - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Galen on his own, as he heads outside -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jyn and Lira run to hide -
…as Lira whispers “JYN…”, and pulls her behind a rock -
…as Lira says “YOU KNOW WHERE TO GO DON’T YOU?” -
…and Jyn nods silently, and Lira takes off her necklace -
…as Lira says “TRUST THE FORCE”, and gives Jyn her necklace -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of Krennic and the black troopers - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Galen walking towards the intruders -
…as Jyn stops running and decides to head back -
…as Krennic and the black troopers approach Galen -
…as Krennic says “YOU’RE A HARD MAN TO FIND GALEN…” -
…and continues to say “…BUT FARMING…REALLY?, A MAN OF YOUR TALENTS?” -
…as Galen says “IT’S A PEACEFUL LIFE” -
…and Krennic says “LONELY I IMAGINE” -
…as Galen says “SINCE LIRA DIED, YES” -
…and Krennic says “OH…”, as he walks forwards saying “OH…MY CONDONLENCES”, as he then turns to the black troopers ordering “SEARCH THE HOUSE!” -
…as Galen says “WHAT IS IT YOU WANT?”, and Krennic replies “THE WORK HAS STALLED…I NEED YOU TO COME BACK” -
…and Galen says “I WON’T DO IT KRENNIC” -
…as Krennic says “WE WERE ON THE VERGE OF GREATNESS, WE WERE THIS CLOSE…TO PROVIDING PEACE AND SECURITY FOR THE GALAXY” -
…and Galen says “YOU’RE CONFUSING PEACE WITH TERROR” -
…as Krennic says “WELL…YOU HAVE TO START SOMEWHERE” -
…as the black troopers search Galen’s property -
…as Galen says “I’D BE OF NO HELP KRENNIC…MY MIND JUST ISN’T WHAT IT WAS…” -
…and continues to say “…I’VE TROUBLE REMEMBERING…EVEN THE SIMPLE THINGS” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jyn is crouched on the ground watching and listening -
…as Krennic says “GALEN…” -
…and continues to say “…YOU’RE AN INSPIRED SCIENTIST, BUT A TERRIBLE LIAR” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we see Lira approaching in the distance, as Krennic says “NOW I ADMIRE THE EFFORT…” -
…and continues to say “…I REALLY DO”, as he turns to notice Lira -
…as we see Lira getting closer, and Krennic says “OH LOOK…” -
…and continues to say “…HERE’S LIRA BACK FROM THE DEAD”, as Galen turns and runs towards her -
…and Krennic says “IT’S A MIRACLE!” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jyn watches the black stormtroopers raise their guns at Galen -
…as Lira keeps running towards them -
…and Krennic raises his arm and shouts “STOP!” -
NOTE - And again this isn’t a biggie by any means, but there’s another slight continuity error here, so I’d prefer to discard this shot of Krennic which appears at this point, as his arm is suddenly down at his side - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Lira raising her concealed gun -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Krennic says “OH LIRA…TROUBLESOME AS EVER” -
…and Lira shouts “YOU’RE NOT TAKING HIM!” -
…as Krennic says “NO, OF COURSE I’M NOT, I’M TAKING YOU ALL…” -
…and continues to say “…YOU’LL ALL COME, YOU, YOUR CHILD, YOU’LL ALL LIVE IN COMFORT”, as Jyn keeps watching and listening -
…and Lira says “AS HOSTAGES” -
…as Krennic says “AS HEROES OF THE EMPIRE” -
…and Galen says “LIRA…PUT IT DOWN” -
…as Krennic warns “THINK VERY CAREFULLY”, as Galen and Jyn look on -
…and Lira says “YOU WILL NEVER WIN!” -
…as Krennic orders “DO IT!” to the stormtroopers, and they shoot Lira -
…and Lira’s gun shoots Krennic in the shoulder -
…as Jyn sees everthing, and Galen shouts “LIRA…NO!” and rushes over to her -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Krennic yells “THEY HAVE A CHILD!..”, and Jyn starts to flee -
…as Krennic orders “…FIND IT!” -
…and Galen holds his dead wife -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard these next two shots of young Jyn running away which appear at this point - CLICK HERE and CLICK HERE, to slightly quicken the pace here.
…and then we CUT* to Jyn running into a nearby cave -
…as she opens a hidden hatch and climbs in -
…and then shuts the hatch behind her -
…and then we continue on as normal, as black stormtroopers search for Jyn -
…as Jyn peers out a small gap -
…and two black troopers enter the cave -
…as Jyn continues to watch through the gap -
…and the two black troopers turn to leave -
…as Jyn stops watching, and climbs down a ladder -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard this shot of Jyn sitting on the floor which appears at this point - HERE
…and then we CUT* to the stormy exterior of the cave that young Jyn is hiding in -
…as Jyn shakes a lamp in the dark to get it to work properly -
…and then looks upwards when she hears someone approaching -
…as we hear footsteps getting nearer the hatch -
…and we end on this shot -
…and then we CUT* to the sound of the hatch opening as adult Jyn suddenly awakens from her ‘flashback’ dream aboard the ship, and looks at the ‘necklace’ her mother gave her -
NOTE - I’m content not to show that it was Saw who opened the hatch, as we already hear Jyn tell the rebels that he saved her life and raised her in this restructure…and we’ve also seen that Jyn’s mother contacted Saw earlier in the ‘flashback’ dream too…so we can reasonably assume that a younger (NON-bald preferably 😉 ) Saw came along and rescued young Jyn at that point, due to those reveals -
…and we then continue on as normal, as Cassian tells K-2SO that they’re coming into orbit, and to take the controls -
…as Jyn puts away her ‘necklace’ and looks out the window -
…as Cassian says “THAT’S JEDHA…OR WHAT’S LEFT OF IT!” -
…as Cassian says “WE FIND SAW…WE FIND YOUR FATHER”, and Jyn stares out the window as the music rises -
…as the ship flies over the surface of Jedha and lands -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the group approach Jedha city -
…and Cassian takes out his macrobinoculars -
…as Jyn says “WHAT’S WITH THE DESTROYER?” -
…and Cassian replies “BECAUSE OF YOUR OLD FRIEND SAW GERRERA…HE’S BEEN ATTACKING THE CARGO SHIPMENTS”, as he looks through the macrobinoculars -
…as Jyn asks “WHAT ARE THEY BRINGING IN?” -
…and Cassian says “IT’S WHAT ARE THEY TAKING OUT”, then passes her his macrobinoculars -
…as Jyn looks through them -
…and Cassian says “THE KYBER CRYSTAL…ALL THEY COULD GET…WE WONDERED WHY THEY WERE RESTRICTING THE TEMPLE…NOW WE KNOW…” -
…and continues to say “…IT’S THE FUEL FOR THE WEAPON” -
…as K-S20 adds “…THE WEAPON YOUR FATHER’S BUILDING” -
…and Jyn says “MAYBE WE SHOULD LEAVE TARGET PRACTICE BEHIND” -
…as K-S2O says “ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT ME?” -
…and Cassian says “SHE’S RIGHT…WE NEED TO BLEND IN…STAY WITH THE SHIP” -
…as K-S2O says “I CAN BLEND IN…I’M AN IMPERIAL DROID…THE CITY IS UNDER IMPERIAL OCCUPATION” -
…and Jyn says “HALF THE PEOPLE HERE WANT TO REPROGRAM YOU…THE OTHER HALF WANT TO PUT A HOLE IN YOUR HEAD”, as Cassian give a wry smirk -
…and K-S20 says “I’M SURPRISED YOU’RE SO CONCERNED WITH MY SAFETY”, as Jyn says “I’M NOT…” -
…and continues to say “…I’M JUST WORRIED THEY MIGHT MISS YOU…AND HIT ME!”, as she hands him a bag -
…and Jyn walks past K-S20, as Cassian gives him a reassuring pat -
…and K-S2O says “DOESN’T SOUND SO BAD TO ME”, as he drops the bag to the ground -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we zoom-in towards Saw’s hide-out -
…where Bhodi is strapped to a chair and we hear a low gutteral roar -
…as the nightmare fuel that is ‘Bor Gullet’ slithers into view -
…and Bhodi looks scared as Saw says “BOR GULLET…CAN FEEL…” -
…and continues to say “…YOUR THOUGHTS”, as we see Bor Gullet’s eye -
…as Saw watches Bor Gullet getting closer to Bhodi, and says “NO LIE…” -
…and continues to say “…IS SAFE!” -
…as a tentacle reaches out at a terrified Bhodi -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard this close-up shot of Bor Gullet’s throbbing eye which appears at this point - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to the tentacles starting to wrap around Bhodi, as Saw says “WHAT HAVE YOU REALLY BROUGHT ME?..” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d also prefer to discard this shot of the tentacles wrapping around Bhodi as Saw continues to say “…CARGO PILOT” which appears at this point - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Saw saying “BOR GULLET…WILL KNOW THE TRUTH…” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d also prefer to discard this shot of the tentacles feeling Bhodi’s head which appears at this point - CLICK HERE
ADDITIONALLY - I’d also prefer to discard this shot of Saw saying “THE UNFORTUNATE SIDE EFFECT…IS THAT ONE TENDS…TO LOSE ONE’S MIND” which appears immediately after - CLICK HERE , as the first few words start off on the previous tentacle shot I want to get rid of.
…and then we CUT* to the engine roar of a cargo ship and TIE fighters flying over Jedha city, as Jyn and Cassian make their way through the city -
NOTE - I’d discard the first part of this shot of the old woman cooking which appears at this point - CLICK HERE , to avoid a continuity mismatch when I cut to another shot featuring the same old woman soon after, where she’s suddenly sitting at another area.
…and then we CUT* to Jyn and Cassian making their way through the bustling city -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - Due to VARIOUS reasons, I’d definitely discard the entire scene of Jyn bumping into the argumentative ‘bad duo’ of Doctor Evazan and Ponda Baba from A NEW HOPE’s Mos Eisley cantina which appears at this point, and ends on this shot as we hear an announcement saying “CITIZENS OF JEDHA…” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to an old woman sitting beside a hologram of Bhodi, as we hear an announcement saying “…YOU MUST COME FORWARD WITH INFORMATION OF THE LOCATION OF THIS MISSING CARGO PILOT…” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we faintly hear the words continuing to say …“A REWARD OF 600 CREDITS FOR ANY INFORMATION SHALL BE AWARDED”, and Jyn and Cassian continue to make their way through the city -
NOTE - Although Jyn and Cassian now end up walking on the other side of each other, I’m content that in motion it looks as if Cassian ends up starting to move to the other side of Jyn during the hologram shot of Bhodi, due to the way they’ve had to move past other people at this point.
…and we continue on as normal, as Jyn and Cassian continue on their way through the city -
NOTE - MOST of the links in this post need REDONE as they were ‘hacked’ too. Below is a REDONE version of the link of Jyn and Cassian continuing on their way through the city link above, using the ‘img.screencaps.us’ wording -
So that’s the way I’d like to see the beginning of this particular movie play out for myself, and one day over the coming weeks I’ll get around to showing how I’d prefer to tweak the way it ends too.
In the meantime, since THE RISE OF SKYWALKER is due for release shortly…I thought it might be fun to describe the scenario I’ve got in mind to alter the most problematic entry in the entire ‘saga’ for myself…so THE LAST JEDI is up NEXT.