For the record, I did not say that.
I liked the way you put it there ;) In general lines it is the same at the end.
The only suggestion I have in this case is to fix it so that Vader doesn't gesture with his hand after the dialogue is through.
I have high hopes making vader a bit more like ESB one. Meaning cutting all the nervous/fast moves he is making and hoping for a total redubing make him deep and calm as he is ESB no more yells and awkward behavior.Thats more like it
-Angel