It's hard to feel the "sense" of a movie when there are a lot of rough cuts. Your slow-motion in that last video you just posted only shows it more. For example, right before Mace kicks Palpatine, he is twirling his saber in his right hand. In the next shot, it's suddenly not being twirled and is over in his left hand. He kicks Palpatine, and in the next shot, Palpatine is already half-way across the air. Rough? Yes.

And regarding the cuts in the scene of Mace telling Anakin to stay, it's not a matter of it being a minor sequence, it's just an example of similar cuts in the videos you've posted so far.

Your ideas are great and very creative. I applaud you for them. It's just their execution that is rough and understandably difficult.