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Episode II: Shroud of the Dark Side (the TM edit) (Released) — Page 97

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mrbenja0618 said:

MTHaslett said:

Is it really that simple, though, I wonder to myself. Because I saw it 4 times and enjoyed it every time... and yet.

What I liked most was that it clearly turned the SAGA into 6 films about Darth Vader. I'm one of those guys who pretty much hates ROTJ as a betrayal of everything the first two Star Wars movies got right. To me, that whole new direction Darth Vader took in ROTJ was one of the biggest disappointments in movie history. So to me, TPM was a step in the right direction and it kind of made ROTJ better because it gave this total lame ass "It's too late for me"-Darth Vader character named "Anakin" some background.

But TPM was riddled through with problems. ...Then someone created "The PHantom Edit"... Then I realized the genius of the PT was to give us fans a bunch of half-completed films so that we could have the adult pleasure of "playing Star Wars" by creating fan-edits! It's the grown-up equivalent for the fun I had with Star Wars figures as a kid.

Thank you, George Lucas, for half-assing the PT. Where would we be if you had done it better?

I agree, I enjoy fanediting, but I don't believe people should make mediocre films to satisfy our need change things.

Ideally, I would rather have the films done right in the first place so I can appreciate and enjoy them now. And TPM was a mess. I understand what you mean by backstory making ROTJ stronger, but the backstory is just riddled with back direction, and no emotion. I personally believe that if TPM had truly been the first Star Wars film, we wouldn't even be here.

Yes, fanediting is fun, but we are left with nearly impossible problems, like making Jar-Jar make sense, and dealing with badly keyed elements in AOTC. (Seriously, it was horrible.)

Of course, this is all my simple opinion, and I realize that art affects people in different ways, and that's the great part about it... But honestly, I do prefer that George put his heart into this like he did when he was younger.

Besides, The Empire Strikes back to me is a perfect movie, but yet, Adywan is making it even stronger.... Lucas could have given us the right movies and I don't think it would have killed SW fanediting. =) No disrespect though, MTHaslett.

Now, i'll stop hijacking the thread. How's it coming, TM?

It's coming OK Ben. I'm sorry for the delay...lot going on the last few days. I think we definitely need to figure out Dooku's new lines and what to do about Jar-Jar though, so I will know how to cut it. Once I finish a scene I am reluctant to go back and change the number of frames because it throws everything off. We have actors lined up for Dooku AND Jar-Jar- the question is what Dooku should say, and in the case of Jar-Jar whether he ought to be in English or some other language. I lean more toward English, if it feels right, because Jar Jar is a primary character in Episode I. The new line from Dooku was meant to illustrate that Qui-Gon really did order the clones, correct? This is a great change but it will require going through Episode I audio tracks to find all the takes of Obi-Wan saying "Qui-Gon", and dub them in over "Syphodias" everywhere the name comes up. Again, Lama-Su will be redubbed. As a side note, since Lama-Su is being redubbed, I'll take this opportunity to ask how you like the name "Marcus Fett" as opposed to "Jango Fett." I remember a couple of people saying that it was jarring, and too different because they knew the character from AOTC. How about Jacob Fett? I just don't like the sound of "Jango"...

Episode II: Shroud of the Dark Side

Emperor Jar-Jar
“Back when we made Star Wars, we just couldn’t make Palpatine as evil as we intended. Now, thanks to the miracles of technology, it is finally possible. Finally, I’ve created the movies that I originally imagined.” -George Lucas on the 2007 Extra Extra Special HD-DVD Edition

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Is any new dialogue for Dooku necessary? I thought MTHaslett's idea to simply cut the dialogue down to imply that Qui-gon *did* know about the corruption was enough...plus, we don't want to know tip our hand too soon revealing Dooku's playing both sides of the field. I suppose something for the conversation with Sidious could be added...maybe implying Dooku's being complicit in Qui-gon's assassination...it'd be nice to have something for Sidious to add, perhaps calling Qui-gon naive/foolish whatever....

Jar Jar: I vote English!

As for Fett, I admit I was one of those jarred by the name change, though I also admit to liking the ring of the name "Marcus Fett." After 8 years (insert "where does the time fly?" here) I've become too accustomed to "Jango," and it served more of a distraction and dissonance in my poor brain..."wait...no, that's Jango!..." I hesitate to call the change "unnecessary," cause, well...this is just the nature inherent of the craft! But, in my most humble of opinions, it ought to be reverted to Jango Fett.  

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I think we should go back to Jango. Marcus is too jarring, like The Concierge said. I don't mind the word Jango so much. I'm more irked by Morrison's accent.

For JarJar, I'm torn about what to suggest. Any change we make will stand out against the rest of the prequels. Can we take a Phantom Editor approach and leave his voice unchanged, but cut his speaking down as much as possible?

You know of the rebellion against the Empire?

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As a side note, since Lama-Su is being redubbed, I'll take this opportunity to ask how you like the name "Marcus Fett" as opposed to "Jango Fett." I remember a couple of people saying that it was jarring, and too different because they knew the character from AOTC. How about Jacob Fett? I just don't like the sound of "Jango"...

 

Boba Fett. Cloning issues aside, it is common on the real world for father and son to share the same name.

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Trooperman said:

One definite change is that Grievous will be redubbed.  I remember seeing ROTS on opening night and being completely distracted by how stupid his voice was.  He needs a more sinister voice to make him into something other than a buffoon....

 Something i did in the March of '09. Would you like to use this sound and redub the scene and place in on youtube. Someone did it once and then i got took off. Would like to see it again.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DjgpWIw_52g&feature=related

 

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Trooperman said:

The new line from Dooku was meant to illustrate that Qui-Gon really did order the clones, correct? This is a great change but it will require going through Episode I audio tracks to find all the takes of Obi-Wan saying "Qui-Gon", and dub them in over "Syphodias" everywhere the name comes up.

We are changing Qui-Gon's name to Sifo-dyas?

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Whoa.

As I understand it:

CHANGE 1: Lama Su says Qui Gonn ordered the clones. Obi Wan reacts (although he doesn't have to repeat the name if you don't want, Trooperman. His lines where he actually repeats the name are less than essential-- but if they work they will help the audience confirm they heard this bomb-shell correctly).

CHANGE 2: Dukoo says that Qui Gonn HAD LEARNED the truth of the Sith when he invites Obi Wan to join him (this can be done with a small edit). He does not, however, mention the clones. No need to add that and tip Dukoo's hand.

CHANGE 3: Dukoo flies to Sidious and reveals that the war has begun. Dialogue to be written will allow Dukoo to also clarify one of the following (we need to pick one):

a) Qui Gonn actually ordered the clones, but Dukoo and Sidious somehow tricked him into it.

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b) it was actually Dukoo who ordered the clones and used Qui Gonn's name to do it.

 

So we need to pick a direction and then write the brief, but believable expositional dialogue that gets us there in the end.

I think I vote that Qui Gonn actually ordered the clones, but I don't know exactly how that gets clarified in the end. What does Dukoo say? The jist should be either: "Good thing Qui Gonn ordered those clones?" or "my apprentice fell for our trick, Qui Gonn's clones are operational!"

 

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Dooku: "Ten years have revealed Qui-gon's sacrifice to be not made in vain: war has begun."

**OPTIONAL**

Sidious: "Qui-gon Jinn was an idealistic fool. His death was a necessary loss; he still served our purpose in the end. You have done well."

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...Maybe something like that?

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Good start, Concierge, but it has to be totally CONFIRMED that Qui Gonn was NOT in league with Dukoo and Sidious.

For example, "It was child's play to dupe my old apprentice into trying to save the republic. Qui Gonn Jinn's army has arrived."

S: "Welcome, Lord Tyrannus"

D: "I bring good news, Master. The war has begun"

S: "Excellent. Everything is going according to plan"

 

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Good point! Hmmmm....How 'bout along the lines of:

"My unwitting slain apprentice's misplaced intentions have availed us, Master: Qui-gon Jinn's army is ready. Darkness gathers. War has begun"

 

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63 INT. CORUSCANT, SECRET LANDING PLATFORM – DAWN 163

The ramp lowers. COUNT DOOKU emerges and walks to where the hooded figure of DARTH SIDIOUS stands waiting. COUNT DOOKU bows.

COUNT DOOKU

The Force is with us, my Master.

DARTH SIDIOUS

Welcome home, Lord Tyranus. You have done well.

COUNT DOOKU

I bring you good news, my Lord. The war has begun.

DARTH SIDIOUS

Excellent.

(smiling)

Everything is going as planned.

I need a reminder of how much time we have to work with.  Would the additions we are proposing fit the scene as it stands now?

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There is a ginormous amount of time watching the ramp lower and Dukoo walk out of the ship and down the ramp (a hallmark of the weird use of screen-time in the PT). 

So an obvious place for added lines is during that long walk.  Dukoo would conceivably come out of his ship eager to talk. 

Nothing else is available really. There's no chance to cut around the dialogue really, so Dooku should probably keep  his line "I bring you good news, my lord. The war has begun."

 

Concierge-- that's a little too much of a mouthful. If I understand your goal, you are trying to say "Qui Gonn started the clones without our direction, but it has worked to our benefit"? I don't think Dukoo would refer to Qui Gonn's death or go any farther than to say the clones arrived (because he has a follow up line about "the war has begun" which should stay.

How about:"Of course he never knew, but my old apprentice handed us victory today. Qui Gonn's Jinn's army is magnificent. It was a master stroke to play upon his idealism"

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Yeah, a little too verbose, there...I guess I was trying to imply Qui-gon was a participant with Dooku, not knowing Dooku was in league with the Sith, but in the end (up to that point, at least) became their unwitting servant.

I like Dooku calling it a victory; it contrasts with Obi-wan (and Yoda being a bit of a pedant) marking it a *Jedi* victory...I also like the sound of "it was a master stroke to play upon his idealism"...this is the time to verify Dooku as a bad guy; I imagine a mocking tone while referencing his apprentice's contributions and death. 

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For inspiration in the area of Grevious:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-1IVhMp2WPk

I always loved the way the original Clone Wars presented him as an absolute badass Jedi killing machine, more of a monster or weapon than the chatty moustache-twirling villain he is in EpIII

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Trooperman said : I'll take this opportunity to ask how you like the name "Marcus Fett" as opposed to "Jango Fett." I remember a couple of people saying that it was jarring, and too different because they knew the character from AOTC. How about Jacob Fett? I just don't like the sound of "Jango"...

Marcus, Jacob?

Please tell me you are having a laugh, you are aren't you?

Sid Christ.

If you can't make Jango into Boba and lose the boy Boba couldn't you just imagine an extra D in the current name?

Django

 

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...or in other words, you'd vote to have Trooperman keep it "Jango"? 

What's with all the judgment? Can we see your edit of ep2 somewhere?

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It seems like ages ago we had the Marcus Fett discussion.

Couldn't we just call him "Fett"?

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I've never had a problem with the name Jango - a lot of prequel names, yes, but not Jango. I just assumed it was George's reference to Django, the spaghetti western character. I was pretty surprised when I watched SotDS that his name was changed to Marcus.

Personally, were it up to me, I'd change back to Jango. But, obviously it's not.

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MTHaslett said:

...or in other words, you'd vote to have Trooperman keep it "Jango"? 

What's with all the judgment? Can we see your edit of ep2 somewhere?

I imagine if Trooperman didn't want any comments he would just make his alterations and let us see the final result.

The names suggested sound too 'everyday' while I understand that Ben and Luke provided a precedent, those were sympathetic characters (well Ben was until he the PT came out). The majority of the characters (especially the darker ones) have slightly other-timely or other-worldly names (just not silly names like Padme or Dooku).

If Jango was called Tjango (for example) it would have sounded almost the same but looked less like "By Jingo" or "Jenga" or "Jingle" (it could have been worse George could have called him Bojangle Fett).

In the Star Wars universe the way a name looks is almost as important as the sound.

Adding a blunt letter at the beginning makes the name look more exotic and sound a little culturally shifted but also makes things easier to sync up than changing the whole name.

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I can't really see a huge benefit in changing it from Jango to Django myself. But I'm of the camp that believes another Fett was pointless anyway. :)

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Oh me too.

But if there has to be two of them I'm of the opinion that giving the other one a commonly heard name compounds the problem.

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Easy enough.  I will change it back to Jango.  It's easy that way.....

Oh, wait...Nute Gunray says "Marcus" in the workprint...I'll have to go through and check if we had him record "Jango" as well.  

I can't redub him because it turned out too well the first time...

Sorry, folks.  Busy stretch...I will be free to work on this soon.

Episode II: Shroud of the Dark Side

Emperor Jar-Jar
“Back when we made Star Wars, we just couldn’t make Palpatine as evil as we intended. Now, thanks to the miracles of technology, it is finally possible. Finally, I’ve created the movies that I originally imagined.” -George Lucas on the 2007 Extra Extra Special HD-DVD Edition

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I prefer Marcus to Jango. I've always thought Jango sounds stupid. Though ideally I'd have him just referred to as Fett.

Trooperman, further to our PMs, do you know of anyone in the UK with the workprint who I could make arrangements with? =)

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Yeah, better if he just says "Fett."

Or one could go all ESB and do it as "bounty hunter" throughout.