I took my time to see the presentation of the bad moments you pointed. At the end i was stunted from the new sfx that you added rather what you cut :P The shot that transformed the jet sound to TIE sound was superb!
Im really intrigued to say you can try a music less version or the music is slight in lower levels. Strategically leveled sfx can lead the eye and the ear to the point of interest.
What else do you plan/already cuted? Will be only edited wise fanedit, or more radical like Bob Garcia is doing?
-Angel