brash_stryker said:

This is actually the line I struggled with most in writing the crawl as it sounds a bit clunky. It's still a work in progress and a loooong way to being finalised, but seceded means to seperate from.

My reasoning was so that it would be clear that they were part of the republic previously.

I'll probably remove the "seceded from and" so that it just reads "several thousand star systems have declared their intentions to overthrow the republic"

Hmm just leave it as you have it, I see now without seceded in it - you lose the sense of chunks of the republic breaking up.

Wish i could view utube at work grrrrrrrrrrr