Oh man, that looks awesome! Thank you so much for putting so much work into this!
Two critiques:
"It's too late. You should have paid him when you had the chance" seems like it might be just outside the "TV safe" zone. Same with "...who drop their shipments at the first sign of an Imperial cruiser."
And I still don't know where I stand on the "two frames" issue ... it still bugs me, but it's how it was originally, right?