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TheBoost
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My Prequel Treatments
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8-Jun-2010, 6:03 PM

STAR WARS

 Episode One

 “Never thought of a title”

 

It is a time of chaos. The ancient Repuplic Galactica is in decline and its once mighty army is withdrawing to the galactic center due to external threats and internal corruption..

 

In the Galactic Rim worlds continue to fall to the clone armies of the Far Outlyers, fierce invaders from beyond the farthest edge of the Republic.

 Leaders of dozens of star systems meet on the planet of Aquillae to plan their defense against the oncoming horde...

 

The film opens on the planet Aquilae. Prince Bail Organa of Alderaan (25), a charming man in regal clothes, is there to plan with the leaders of the other planets in the area a mutual defense plan against the encroaching Outlyers. When King Kaylos of Aquliae suggests that they need to petition the Republic for defense, Bail replies that "The White Legions of the Republic are not likely to return." Overall Bail is pessimistic and noncommittal in the face of the endless waves of cloned shock troopers the Outlyers possess.

 

Suddenly the city receives an orbital bombardment. A hologram reports that Condawn has fallen and that the Outlyers are here! The attack is being led by Commodore Lokheid, a sadistic and cruel Outlyer in burnished silver armor. The Clone Shocktroopers wear simpler grey armor.

 

Bail flees with some of his bodyguards, the Rangers, including Ranger Arcadia (female, 19) and the grizzled veteran Ranger Thorpe (male 60s). Almost break the blockade in Bail's spaceship but are captured before they can make the jump to hyperdrive by the massive shark like Outlyer flagship. They are boarded by the clone shocktroops and Ranger Thorpe is killed by another outlyer in a horned helmet when his blaster bolts deflect off the man's thick armor and is stabbed by the blades on his forearms.

 

Ranger Arcadia is thrown into the dungeon, where in the next cell she meets Obi-Wan Kenobi (bearded, mid-30s), Jedi Knight. He was captured at the Battle of  Condawn. Meanwhile Bail is confronted by Lord Ruthven, the red-armored leader of the Outlyers (the same one who killed Throper). Ruthven is a massive man, bearded and extremely tall; a barbarian king in the vein of Atilla or Ghengis Khan; brutal but not without wisdom.  He has one goal- power, and no scruples stand in his way. Ruthven is accompanied by his son, Woyric (late 20s). In contrast to his father, Woyric is clearly insane, almost frothing at the mounth when angered, which is frequent. Woryric wears intricately decorated golden armor.

 

Bail tells Ruthven he has no intention of fighting in the aid of Aquilae, that Alderaan has always beleived in a Live and Let Live policy. Back in the dungeon, Ranger Arcadia (who confesses this is her first mission as a Ranger) convinces Obi-Wan to help her escape. With almost comic ease he does so, and reveals the only reason he had been allowing himself to be held captive was in the hope he would be brought face-to-face with Lord Ruthvin. He's extremely confident; a James Bond type.

 

Obi-Wan gets out, eliminated the guard and gets his lightsaber from lock-up, and while he and Arcadia flee they encounter Bail, who was being taken to the brig. They rescue Bail, kill some guards, and break into the hangar, where they steal a small ship and make a quick jump to hyperspace. Lord Ruthven is furious and sends his son to apprehend them.

 

Coming out of hyperspace, Obi-Wan crash-lands on the planet Tatooine. Obi-Wan crashed the ship intentionally, knowing it was being tracked. Bail does NOT like Obi-Wan, but realized he's in the Jedi's hands. It comes ou that the Jedi are being encouraged by the Republic not to go to the border systems, but remain close to the Galactic Hub and protect them. Obi-Wan has no time for politics. Bail believes that every system needs to see to their own defense, and that attacking the Outlyers is madness.

 

Back on Aquilae, Lord Ruthven is digging in with the construction of a massive Orbital Cannon. The pieces are being lowered from orbit from the Outlyer Flagship. Floating around the incomplete canon on a hovering platform along with Lokheid and King Kaylos, Ruthven declared to the gathered mob that Aquilae will be the bulwark from which all other Rim worlds will fall. He demands that King Kaylos swear fealty to him, and when Kaylos refuses Ruthven snaps his neck and hurls the body down the barrel of the canon.

 

Back on Tatooine, the first structure our heroes come to is the moisture farm of Owen Lars (35) and his wife Beru Skywalker-Lars (early 20s). The farmstead is several small decrepit structures of prefabricated housing. They are recent immigrants to Tatooine, fleeing the carnage of war on their home planet. Obi inquires after a ship, and they say that Anakin, Beru's twin brother, is a pilot with his own ship and is in town delivering medical supplies.

 

While medical supplies may be on the manifest too, Anakin also delivers spice, booze, hardware, guns, and whatever else might turn a quick profit. Perhaps it’s one of these things that has him in the middle of a barfight (real Old West style) when Obi-Wan and Arcadia find him. He's doing well in a 1-vs-9 fight (almost unnaturally well), but they help him out and carry him home.

 

Anakin is a young man of mercurial temperaments, and hates Tatooine with a passion. Obi-Wan offers him cash and adventure for a lift to Alderaan, and Anakin's only concern is leaving his sister. Beru encourages him to go, because "building a life from nothing isn't the path for everyone." Anakin agrees to take them in his ship, "The Angel Blue." That night, while Anakin, Owen, and Bail prep the ship and Beru and Arcadia briefly bond (Beru explains her hopes of having a family and building something of worth), and Obi Wan stands watch.

 

This is when Woyric and his squadron of 20 clone troops attack. There's a classic settler vs. bandit shootout before our heroes jump into the shiny new landspeeder (which audiences will recognize from the OT) and lead the Outlyer troops away. Anakin drives into a canyon, where he leads the villains into a confrontation with some kind of desert creature (perhaps a Krayt dragon!). With the enemy halted, the heroes go back to the homestead, which is burning.

 

Owen says to Obi "You've brought trouble to my home. I never want to see you again." Bail is deeply moved by the carnage; good people losing everything, and Anakin slips his entire cash payment to his sister and embraces her before they launch off.