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Post #400952

Author
xhonzi
Parent topic
How deeply rooted is "suck" in the Prequels?
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Date created
4-Mar-2010, 12:31 PM

Attack of the Clones:

The Republic is unable to defeat their enemy <in the Clone Wars> because they don't know exactly who or where they are.  Obi-Wan Kenobi, Jedi Knight, has captured a curious piece of enemy weaponry that may provide the clues to finding their foes.  He <and a crack team on soldiers> conduct a galaxy wide campaign which ultimately reveals the identity, location, and purpose of the enemy.

Meanwhile, Anakin Skywalker and <the girl> are on the run from <something.>  They have a pic-nic and fireside dinner.  They fall in love?  Or maybe they don't.  But then she watched him do something evil wherein she finally decides that she must love him.  <He has to protect her constantly from danger at every turn.  Every time he saves her, she feels more indebted to him and the gratitude leads her to place him very high in her esteem to the point that she is also in love with him, just as he is with her.>  Eventually they hook back up with Obi-Wan <and his soldiers> as they find the homebase of the enemy and the full on war is officially begun.

I had to flatout replace some of the ideas to make them good as opposed to simply simplifying them.  Those are the ideas in <>'s.  These two ideas I think are good enough for a Star Wars story, but the execution (Dexter's Diner?  The Hills are Alive with the Sound of Music?) was so extemely off that it came across as mostly terrible.  And don't get me started on silly/scary C-3PO...