Asteroid-Man said:
Turmoil had engulfed the Galactic Senate with several star systems having declared their intentions to leave the Republic through a Separatist movement led by the mysterious Count Dooku.
The Jedi Knights, guardians of peace and justice in the Galaxy, were
becoming overwhelmed. The Senate proposed creating a Grand Army of the Republic to assist them. Senator Amidala was returning to the Senate to vote on this critical issue.
22 Years Later
Rebel Starships, striking from a hidden base, have won their first victory against the evil Galactic Empire and its ultimate weapon, the Death Star, an armored space station with enough power to destroy an entire planet.
Pursued by the Empire's sinister agents, Princess Leia races home aboard her Starship, custodian to the stolen plans for the Death Star that can help ensure the safety of the Galaxy.
See, that's better, but if you want to treat this edit like a whole new version of Star Wars, something anyone could pick up and watch (instead of just Star Wars fans like us), you need a MUCH broader introduction than that. You throw names and terms at the audience right away that they have no way of understanding, and although I understand that you're trying to introduce the whole flashback concept immediately with that "22 Years Later" thing, a general audience would just be confused as heck, wondering where an Empire and some kind of Rebellion came from (even if you do show these facts later on).
My two cents, at least.