Ripplin said:
Your double spacing before every new sentence is interesting. Haha. Anyway, it's well written overall. In the last paragraph, might it be better to put "the work Lucasfilm should have done already"?
It's all about
dramatic pauses.
Post #389555
- Author
- doubleofive
- Parent topic
- Petition Support Video
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/389555/action/topic#389555
- Date created
- 21-Dec-2009, 10:54 AM