The first Dark Empire page you posted:

- The Noghri looks good, if slightly out of place given the art style
- His line should be: "It was in Thrawn's possession. Our brother Rukh took it from the Admiral after he killed him. He was then gunned down by Stormtroopers ... "
- Text box in the third panel should read: "As the Noghri offers Leia the Holocron, the Princess immediately feels the presence of the Force in the artifact."

Second page:
- Last speech bubble should read "Your research has finally brought you here!"

Other than those notes, it looks very good. This one seems like it would involve much more intricate, detailed "editing" than the Thrawn trilogy did. Good luck!

Now to get back to Dark Force Rising ...