rcb said:
Bingowings said:
Personally for the reasons I've already described I'd prefer the original dialogue but spoken by Ian, but if you were to go down that route why not go a bit further with your shifting and cut much of the grovelling and to the chase?
VADER: What is thy bidding, my master?
EMPEROR: There is a great disturbance in the Force, we have a new enemy.
VADER: I have felt it.
EMPEROR: He could destroy us.
VADER: Is that possible? He's just a boy, Obi-Wan can no longer help him.
EMPEROR: The Force is strong with him. The son of Skywalker must not become a Jedi.
VADER: If he could be turned, he would become a powerful ally.
EMPEROR: Yes, yes, he would be a great asset. Can it be done?
VADER: He will join us or die, my master.the third line for vader kinda sounds sandwhiched together, i think it'd be better as two lines. and i still think we need to keep the line "young skywalker" or "the young rebel who destroyed the death star" or something similiar.
if i was a complete stranger to the movie, i might wonder who this new "enemy" is.
The added "How Is that possible" doesn't make sense, Vader at this point knows who Luke is and I don't buy this testing nonsense.
If it has to go in dropping the "How" makes the addition at least make some sense because now it's attached to Vader being alerted to the possibility that Luke isn't just a Force sensitive Rebel but someone that even Palpatine says could destroy both of them.
If Luke can destroy the Emperor as Palpatine says he can he could be a poweful ally, to Vader's own ambitions.
Anyone not knowing that they are talking about Luke at this point is too stupid to be watching this film.
From the crawl onwards we know Vader has been seeking Luke and he gets a name check in the dialogue anyway.
As I said, I'd prefer the original dialogue but if people want to shift the words around at least point them in the right direction.