SomethingStarWarsRelated said:
Wow thanks again for the feedback, guys!
Monroville said:
Some good work there, SSWR!
I like how you got Yoda to do the coughing. As a suggestion, could you make an alternate edit?
Personally, I could see the beginning with Vader removed entirely and just start on Dagobah. In fact, I would not show the X-wing or R2 and just show Luke (recoloring his EMPIRE outfit to black) running through the forest and CGI Yoda off his back (since he would be back in the hut, with Luke doing his final training on his own) and maybe his green lightsabre on (or it could be kept off to save it for the barge fight reveal). I would never show Luke's face, so when he reveals himself before Jabba, it is the first time we see him completely.
What kind of programs do you use for your editing?Well, I like the sound of that too...If I tried that it would be even more rough...I can't erase Yoda very well with what I use (adobe premiere and photoshop elements)...I don't know...I might attempt something like this eventually...
Don't worry about deleting Yoda from Luke's back; the main change would be making his clothes black and using footage where we can't see his face; the idea is to create the concept of Luke training on his own for universal viewing. Per a finished product/edit, Yoda can remain inside the hut .. in fact, all scenes with Luke's face shots could be removed so when we hear Luke the camera is always on Yoda (so Luke's voice would come from off screen). Even after Yoda dies/disappears, the camera can linger on Yoda's empty clothes as we hear Luke leave as well as show the lighting on Yoda's clothes darken as the light in the hut is "turned off" by Luke as he leaves. I would also consider adding rain sound effects to further emphasize Luke's emotional state and situation (minus thunder - that might be a little too much).
If Luke says anything after Yoda's death, we can hear him as from a distance (as he leaves the hut) as we keep the shot on Yoda's clothes to emphasize Luke being alone. The next shot could then show an X-wing leaving Dagobah, which could then allow the "Dagobah to space" shot to segway from space down to the surface of Tatooine, where we see C3P0 and R2D2 approaching Jabba's palace. Everything would then procede as the theatrical version (plus or minus Boba, Lapti Nek's replacement song, and any other edits).
The main jist would be to see if you can do a Dagobah beginning without showing Luke's face until his theatrical reveal in Jabba's palace, thus maintaining the integrity of the GOUT pacing. And again, I would go to Dagobah after the opening scroll and just cut out the DS2 reveal with Vader - we get it later with the Emperor's arrival, making the beginning scene 100% irrelevant.
PS: Vaderios: in regards to the "Leia's apartment layout", I believe that 005 and others have already created diagrams as to possible layouts somewhere in the middle of the EMPIRE:REVISITED thread (not sure what the exact pages are, but there should be plenty of images).