Darth Venal said:If I were to make any change, it would be to make the firing chambers immensely bigger (is immensely a word?) because I don't really feel the true power of lasers that are only as thick as the officers standing beside them.
I'd shrink down the size of the guards and their station to me very small next to the weapon, that's the only real way to give it true scale.
Is this along the lines of what you are thinking? It's rough, and could definitely use some improvement, but I think it helps to get the idea across.