I haven't had a chance to watch it fully yet but the quality is sufficient to follow in a small window.

I will make time to have a good look at it and deliver my comments later but from what I can see it's not really a revamp of the Reborn idea as I understood it because the flashback material doesn't follow Anakin's story to contrast and compare Luke's journey in the same manner that Godfather II does with both generations of the Corleone family.

There is a golden opportunity here to remove the worst of the PT and some of the fat of the OT and make something that sits well as new telling of the story.

So what you need to ask yourself is how much of the PT do you really need to give the backstory of Anakin and the rise of the Empire and how much of the OT can you afford to remove to make way for it?

Do you need the majority of the droid factory and Threepio's head swap from AOTC for example, does that really add new insight into what happens to Luke? Does it explain much about what Anakin later does or how the Empire rises?

If you look at the flashbacks in Godfather II they largely follow in a linear fashion, we see Vito as a child, then a young man and how he rises to the position we finally see him in the first film.

Here the flashbacks jump around a bit more which can make the story a bit difficult to follow.

I would also consider changing the Journal Of The Whills quote as at no point do we hear of a "son of suns" (other than an allusion to Tatooine).

If this mythical saviour was "he who walks the sky" or something like that, it would tie in with the story as both Anakin and Luke (and indeed Leia) are Skywalkers.

As I said earlier I will give a more detailed response when I've had a chance to give the work copy the attention it deserves.