SomethingStarWarsRelated said:

Thought this video might stir up a few things ;)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AhIsXqzs_14

It's rough but what do ya think?

-Tried making Anakin a likeable guy.

-I've removed the first part of the Palpy office scene thinking (*IF* it should even be used) it could be moved to later in the film.

-Oh! And why the hell does Palpy have to be behind EVERY plot point?! I've removed any sort of reference to that.

-I still don't know what to do with the Jedi and Padme conversation...

A minor thing, but I'd lose "who's trying to kill you" in the apartment scene, to avoid unnatural conversation repetition.

i.e.

Padme: "I want to know who's trying to kill me"
Anakin" We will find out who's trying to kill you, Padme"