I agree it's a fine line between tell and show and tell but these are pieces of cinema and not audio drama so while some restraint can make for better story telling, sometimes you can't beat just putting it up there (the putting up there bit is more difficult).
Another sequence I suggested sometime back was to have the Falcon and Luke's X-Wing attacked as it tried to leave Tatooine (Vader wants both captured to get Luke before for the Emperor can and knows he will try to save Han at some point), once again something similar was put into the radio drama version, Star Wars is usually at it best when it has little out the frying pan into the fire moments like this and it would deliver a bit more of a punch to the end of the first act and remind us that the Empire is a much more dangerous threat than Jabba :
