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Post #353036

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Darknikos
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FIXED UNIVERSE: The Expanded Universe fan-editing - THE WHOLE THRAWN TRILOGY IS NOW AVAILABLE
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Date created
7-Apr-2009, 2:38 AM

...sorry for the delay, these are very busy days!

Anyway... I've done all the changes you suggest, except for:

Page 33: you suggest to change Thrawn's line to "I've decided to give the Noghri one last chance.  I'll personally deliver C'Baoth that message." but in the original Thrawn didn't say that he will be delivering the message to C'baoth personally, but to the Noghri.
So he say to tell C'baoth that he allow the noghri one last chance, and he'll be taking the message to the noghri personally.
Are you agree or I've missed something?

Page 34 (yes, it was in the original): So, right, they were on the forest moon of Endor, not on the planet. And, now that I think about it, if we want to be rigorous, on that moon isn't begin the New Republic... but the Alliance of Free Planets, like we can see on the Marvel comic books.
Anyway, I've always thought that she's speaking to her yet to born children... maybe we can make this more clear.
So, I'm now thinking that the line can be changed in something like:
"You see that, my dear children? That's the forest moon of Endor, where the Rebel Alliance triumphed over the Empire."
What do you think about it?

ChainsawAsh said:

This comic is set up and organized extremely poorly, making it a bit of a chore to read, and the adaptation is choppy to say the least.  Neither of those things are even remotely your fault - the blame for that lies on Mike Baron, Terry Dodson, Bob Cooper and David Land.

The book should be... "rearranged". I'm doing something similar with Dark Empire (I'll post something after the Thrawn trilogy will be definitely OK) rearranging pages and illustrations from both of three chapter of the trilogy, in a new story.
But in this case I think we haven't enough material to do it...