It's a little modern for Star Wars. Aside from Battlestar, most of the old scifi series haven't deviated much from their roots. Regardless of how you cut the video, we need some authentic excerpts from the score.
Look at Stargate in the '90s -
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gqDS6eOG_hM
Look at Stargate now -
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NYS0EVZJQMU
Here's what they were doing in the '70s, in the time of the originals.
Classic Galactica - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6d89RYN6gwI
and Buck Rogers - http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=663313548897022933
Take notes - it's always upbeat and setting up some kind of adventure and action.
Here's another example of what a hokey fantasy show was like a few years ago (note the narration style for the recap at the beginning - not today's hoarse whispering, but the in-your-face, cranked up to 11 style).