Monroville said:
I would keep this shot clean of any added SDs, being that the IMperial Fleet would be "behind" the camera view.
REPLY - I absolutely agree! This was just originally a rough indication that the Planet could have been 'surrounded' to a certain degree, as I thought that there was going to be quite a large Fleet perhaps, and that it would be interesting to show that they would spread fairly wide around the Planet. However, having thought about Adywan's intentions today for a more modest amount of ships, I think you are definately correct that the fewer Stardestroyers that the ION Cannon fires towards here (and that the 'Transport' heads towards too), WOULD be 'behind' this P.O.V. shot!
This is where I would add the rest of the Imperial Fleet in the background, about half the size or smaller than the Avenger (since the Avenger was rushing to make the first kill).
REPLY - Again, I think this would be a great addition here. You have the possible placement and 'scale' spot on here, and think their addition into this would tie-in VERY well with some of the previous Stardestroyer positioning we see!
Note: Is it really the 'Avenger' that is the most foremost Stardestroyer here? The foremost one (seen in this shot) is the one that gets disabled isn't it? The 'Avenger' is another one that eventually chases after the Millennium Falcon, isn't it?
I would add the background fleet in the later part of the camera pan here, to show them closing in.
REPLY - Again, this would be a great addition at this point!
You could maybe add some tracks here to show that Luke has at least walked from over the ridge (from the center to the lower left). I see now that there are tracks directly behind him (so this is a very minor alteration suggestion), just a suggestion so we can better see the tracks.
REPLY - Trivial and unexciting. But a really nice subtle spot, and I'll take it!
Could improve the background sky area.
REPLY - Absolutely! Especially when we see how great Ady's 'ION Cannon' background looks now....
I would replace the Executor with two or three disabled SDs off to the right background, to imply that the path the rebels took (and the previous location of the Imperial Fleet) was way off to the right.
REPLY - Absolutely, once again! I've previously flipped between whether I thought a disabled Stardestroyer would be better added to this shot OR if it should be added to the next one with the receding X-Wing instead. In the end I suggested adding one to the next shot. However, I now clearly see the better option of showing something along the lines of what you've suggested here, that would look terrific if added into this shot instead, especially when taken in conjunction with your next comments!
I would keep this shot clean, as of by now Luke would be far away from the main rebel escape point and the ion battle. You could possibly show the stars start to speed up as Luke increases speed to prep for the hyperspace jump.
REPLY - Agreed! It does make sense from a positioning / distance aspect, that we see the disabled Stardestroyer(s) on the previous shot instead, and in the position you describe....
Adywan, as far as I'm concerned, this particular post by Monroville is a gold nugget!
I REALLY dig these suggestions of his here, and feel that taken as a whole, that they are a BIG improvement to this sequence in general! Certainly something for you to consider.
Monroville, nice one! I'd happily see these ideas realised, as they would enhance the existing shots wonderfully. Well thought out indeed. I've just copied your comments (as the shots are nearby here already), and added some of my own for you, beside each one.
Of course, I'll take whatever excellence Adywan comes up with, and like it! But I certainly like these proposals....a LOT.