ChainsawAsh said:TheBoot, you have some good ideas, but it feels simultaneously too similar to ideas already presented to the point where it's really not much new, and too similar to the prequels as they exist today. I know that seems contradictory, but that's the feeling I got when I read them. Also, it's far too clear that Anakin is Vader at the end. But there are some good ideas in there, as well.
Like I said, I'm really trying to make an amalgam of what I think are some of the stronger concepts presented so far, I'm not trying to present it as 'mine.'