Heks, glad to hear you have some experience. It's a head start at least.
Your interrogation edit looks like it just might work. Of course seeing in action is sometimes a different beast. Looking good so far though.
As for the sense of danger opst, I totally agree. Hopefully by cutting the goofy shit, adding more thrilling and familiar music, and making some key edits to such scenes as the staircase trap, the quicksand, the jungle chase, the water in the end, etc.