I've now watched your edit about 6 times (bits and pieces here and there, straight through twice), and while I know you have no intention of touching this project ever again, two things occurred to me while watching the DVD9 last night.
The first is that the Falcon jump out of hyperspace over Yavin does look a little canned. I think what might make it easier for the mind to accept is if there was a brief flash of light as the Falcon comes into the screen, just to visually cue that the Falcon has left hyperspace (which is suggested via blue light in the Falcon's cockpit, your use of which is brilliant, so I would think a blue flash of light would make sense).
The second thing, and this really only occurred to me for the first time just last night after having watched this movie dozens of times, is when Red squadron does their 'standing by' routine during the approach on the Death Star. For whatever reason, they don't call out in sequential order, as in Red 1 should go first, then Red 2, etc. This makes no sense to me, as you would not really know when you are expected to do your 'standing by' call if everyone was just calling out randomly. The only reason I could come up with for why Lucas chose to do it this way is that the call out order was based on rank, not number. Now I know this is being incredibly anal, but the more I think about it, the more it bugs me. Anyway, these might be things for future editors to attempt (or myself if I ever decide to take a stab at it).
Again, thanks for all the hard work.