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Originally posted by: professa skiving at work
you could just alter the pause so instead of
there you will learn from yoda ... the jedi master who instructed me
you'd have
there you will learn from yoda the jedi master ... who instructed me
or even just
there you will learn from yoda ... the jedi master.
you could just alter the pause so instead of
there you will learn from yoda ... the jedi master who instructed me
you'd have
there you will learn from yoda the jedi master ... who instructed me
or even just
there you will learn from yoda ... the jedi master.
Or:
There you will learn from yoda ... who instructed me
which sounds more like something you'd actually say ^^
(or you could rearrange the whole thing into [There you will learn from][the jedi master][Yoda][who instructed me])
But personally I don't think this line should be changed, you could try to make the "the" into an "a", but I doubt it can be done so easily (remember 'your father <-> I')