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DarthBo
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STAR WARS: EP V "REVISITED EDITION"ADYWAN - 12GB 1080p MP4 VERSION AVAILABLE NOW
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26-Feb-2008, 12:35 PM
Originally posted by: professa skiving at work
you could just alter the pause so instead of

there you will learn from yoda ... the jedi master who instructed me

you'd have

there you will learn from yoda the jedi master ... who instructed me

or even just

there you will learn from yoda ... the jedi master.

Or:
There you will learn from yoda ... who instructed me
which sounds more like something you'd actually say ^^
(or you could rearrange the whole thing into [There you will learn from][the jedi master][Yoda][who instructed me])

But personally I don't think this line should be changed, you could try to make the "the" into an "a", but I doubt it can be done so easily (remember 'your father <-> I')