Originally posted by: darkhelmet
Very cool! Just watched Chapter 1, and aside from the audio editing, I'm really excited to see how this project turns out!
Just one critique: some of the resequencing is a bit jarring/confusing. Jarring - i.e., the different backgrounds when Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon meet Maul (though it gets tied together better when they move the fight into the power core [?] area). Confusing - i.e., Hologram Sidious is saying "It's too aggressive", but it's not clear what was too aggressive; the ship in the forest doesn't seem to be aggressive without some kind of explanation.
Very exciting overall to see Episode I boiled down to something very action packed with minimal silliness! Nice job, jedi_jra.
Very cool! Just watched Chapter 1, and aside from the audio editing, I'm really excited to see how this project turns out!
Just one critique: some of the resequencing is a bit jarring/confusing. Jarring - i.e., the different backgrounds when Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon meet Maul (though it gets tied together better when they move the fight into the power core [?] area). Confusing - i.e., Hologram Sidious is saying "It's too aggressive", but it's not clear what was too aggressive; the ship in the forest doesn't seem to be aggressive without some kind of explanation.
Very exciting overall to see Episode I boiled down to something very action packed with minimal silliness! Nice job, jedi_jra.
Thanks for the comments. I've removed the too agressive line. I agree, it really didn't make sense. The Maul battle was a tough one. I think I've justified in my mind that the power core and the hallway are similar enough, and the fact that it's on the planet, Maul simply enters from outside. (Reminds me somewhat of the bunker in ROTJ on Endor when Han and the Rebels enter) It appears the corridor has 3 hallways shaped like a " T ". Maul enters from the bottom of the " T " where the camera is placed to watch obi-wan and Qui-gon. This is where Obi-wan is looking when he alerts Qui-Gon.
I've also removed the hangar seen mentioned above by PSYCHO_DAYV, and replaced it with Obi-wan, Qui-gon, and Jar jar entering in the sub, presumably from the swamp which in my scroll, is where they had to land. Jar-Jar is simply acting as a guide and local companion. We see "another" gungan escorting the Queen later (pretend it is not Jar Jar). Now I don't have to remove Jar jar from the scene where obi-wan and qui-gon sneak into the city.
I have added some battle scenes, trimmed some dialog, and made a lot of other little changes (Maul no longer sprays red blood when sliced in half). I'm attempting to learn how to edit the audio. The audio is still far from perfect, but I think it is a major improvement over the original rough cut.
This revised edit includes the Phantom menace scroll, however eventually i would like to remove it and replace it with my own. At the end I added the funeral score to give an example of how the lead into Part II would be, signifying both the death of Qui-gon and the Trade Federation taking over Naboo.
Here ya go:
http://www.megaupload.com/?d=S5PGVSFR